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Zoos should be banned because it is cruel to keep wild animals in captivity. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Zoos should be banned because it is cruel to keep wild animals in captivity. with this statement? Dl1gm
Zoos, nowadays, are becoming very popular before ever. However, an argument has been pushed forward that creatures in zoological parks are treated with extremely low-grade conditions and might harm them physically and psychologically. I partially agree with the given notion since zoos are the best place for education and leisure purposes yet ministry must keep an eye on it. Fundamentally, various factor makes agree with the presented argument, and there are myriad reasons to substantiate. Firstly, The wild-animals in zoological parks get food without any struggle. Means to says, the struggle is the best teacher of life, but if struggle gets eliminated from life, the beasts would lose their identity and even their corwn. For example, tigers generally eat food in cages without any hunting practice, after which they will not be able to hunt if they are released to wild habitats. Secondly, creatures in menageries usually feel slavery. Animals, like humans, also have internal feeling and emotions, which enable them to observe the difference between life in cages and forests. However, there are also some positive aspects of keeping wild animals in zoos. Chiefly, zoos are the best places for research and investigation of various facets of a particular animal. The university students frequently visit zoos in order to understand the behaviour of animals and to complete their assignments. yet if beasts could be released from these parks, it would be a difficult task for investigators to know about wildlife in dense forests. Moreover, the typical population can not visit the forest to watch wild species and for them, the zoos are the best alternatives. This process also includes the revenue to regional ministry through the sales of the tickets for visiting such parks. In conclusion, many think, and I partially agree, that zoos harm wild-beasts in some ways, including physically and psychologically, but positive facets of such areas can not be neglected because these parks provide locals and educational people to fulfil their requirements. The government must impose some restrictions on zoos in regard to harming creatures.
Zoos, nowadays, are becoming
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very
popular
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before
ever.
However
, an argument has
been pushed
forward that creatures in zoological
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parks
are treated
with
extremely
low-grade conditions and might harm them
physically
and
psychologically
. I
partially
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agree
with the
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given
notion since zoos are the
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best
place for education and leisure purposes
yet
ministry
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must
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keep
an eye on it.

Fundamentally
, various factor
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makes
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agree
with the presented argument, and there are myriad reasons to substantiate.
Firstly
, The wild-animals in zoological
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parks
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get
food without any struggle. Means to
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says
, the struggle is the
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best
teacher of life,
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but
if struggle
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gets
eliminated from life, the beasts would lose their identity and even their
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corwn
.
For example
, tigers
generally
eat food in cages without any hunting practice, after which they will not be able to hunt if they
are released
to wild habitats.
Secondly
, creatures in menageries
usually
feel slavery.
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Animals
, like humans,
also
have internal feeling and emotions, which enable them to observe the difference between life in cages and forests.

However
, there are
also
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some
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positive
aspects of keeping wild
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animals
in zoos.
Chiefly
, zoos are the
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best
places for research and investigation of various facets of a particular
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animal
. The university students
frequently
visit zoos in order to understand the
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behaviour
of
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animals
and to complete their assignments.
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yet
if beasts could
be released
from these
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parks
, it would be a difficult task for investigators to know about wildlife in dense forests.
Moreover
, the typical population can not visit the forest to
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watch
wild species and for them, the zoos are the
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best
alternatives. This process
also
includes the revenue to regional ministry through the sales of the tickets for visiting such parks.

In conclusion
,
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think
, and I
partially
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, that zoos harm wild-beasts in
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some
ways, including
physically
and
psychologically
,
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but
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positive
facets of such areas can not
be neglected
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these
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parks
provide locals and educational
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people
to fulfil their requirements. The
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government
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must
impose
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some
restrictions on zoos in regard to harming creatures.
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IELTS essay Zoos should be banned because it is cruel to keep wild animals in captivity. with this statement?

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