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The parents and elders believe that the children should spend less time in front of the computer screens as it is harmful to the eyes. To what extent do you agree or disargee?

The parents and elders believe that the children should spend less time in front of the computer screens as it is harmful to the eyes. kY7Re
Ultraviolet rays through computer and mobile screens are harmful to our eyes and our parents suggest that we should not spend much time in front of these. We agree with the above statement. However, We believe that in today's fast-paced digital lifestyle gadgets have become an essential part of our life. We will discuss how these technologies are harmful yet important in our life in this essay. To commence with, there are dreadful effects of such screens on human eyes that includes short-sightedness, Far-sightedness and many more. The rays which screens emit are the sole reasons for the majority of the eye problems. To illustrate, a human eye is capable of capturing a certain amount of light in order to process the image, over bright light results in over-stretching of the muscles that hold our eyes ball. As a result, muscles lose their stretching capability which results in vision problems. According to a recently published report by the doctor's council in India, 4 out of 5 teenagers is now having vision problems and cited reasons are the overuse of mobiles and other devices. Although the effects of such technologies on the human body are terrible, one cannot pursue his career in their absence. Digital personal assistants such as hand-held devices or computers are now a vital part of any individual's professional and personal life. Especially, during the pandemic times, the digital platform has come out as a lifesaver for students. Starting from attending online classes to assignment submission a student requires a personal computer. Hence, judicious use is required to minimize the damage. Therefore, an optimum level of brightness and specially designed monitors which are designed to emit less harmful rays should be used to decrease the damage. To conclude, we agree with our parent's opinion to decrease our screen time but cannot be completely removed from our lifestyle.
Ultraviolet rays through computer and mobile
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screens
are harmful to our
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eyes
and our parents suggest that we should not spend much time in front of these. We
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agree
with the above statement.
However
, We believe that in
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today
's
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fast
-paced digital lifestyle gadgets have become an essential part of our life. We will discuss how these technologies are harmful
yet
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important
in our life in this essay.

To commence with, there are dreadful effects of such
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screens
on human
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eyes
that includes
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short-sightedness
,
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Far-sightedness
and
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many
more. The rays which
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screens
emit are the sole reasons for the majority of the
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eye
problems. To illustrate, a human
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eye
is capable of capturing a certain amount of light in order to process the image, over bright light results in over-stretching of the muscles that hold our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
eyes
ball.
As a result
, muscles lose their stretching capability which results in vision problems. According to a recently published report by the doctor's council in India, 4 out of 5
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
is
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now
having vision problems and cited reasons are the overuse of mobiles and other devices.

Although the effects of such technologies on the human body are terrible, one cannot pursue his career in their absence. Digital personal assistants such as hand-held devices or computers are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
a vital part of any individual's professional and personal life.
Especially
, during the pandemic times, the digital platform has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
out as a lifesaver for students. Starting from attending online classes to assignment submission a student requires a personal computer.
Hence
, judicious
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
is required
to minimize the damage.
Therefore
, an optimum level of brightness and
specially
designed monitors which
are designed
to emit less harmful rays should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to decrease the damage.

To conclude
, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with our parent's opinion to decrease our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
screen
time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
cannot be completely removed from our lifestyle.
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IELTS essay The parents and elders believe that the children should spend less time in front of the computer screens as it is harmful to the eyes.

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309 words
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