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Youth crime increasing rapidly in cities around world discuss give the reason and solution

Youth crime increasing rapidly in cities around world discuss give the reason and solution rb1P6
The rise in crime rate among young people is a serious matter of concern these days. It is heart-wrenching to see young people going astray in the society. This essay will examine the possible reasons of the increased crime rate among youngsters and possible solutions that could address this menace The possible reasons for the rise in the youth crime could be attributed to drug addiction, unemployment or troubled childhood. The principal cause, to me, is doing drugs and binge drinking among youth. It is a common sight to see teenagers drink excessively, and under the influence of alcohol they lose control and commit crimes. For example, it has often been witnessed that fights break out outside of pubs and clubs in New Delhi. Law enforcement agencies also opine that there is a direct connection of crime with the drug abuse these days. Additionally, some teenagers form a nasty habit of doing drugs and get addicted to it profusely. Their state is so bad that in order to feed their addiction, they do not mind committing any petty crimes. There are ways to combat this sort of crime that has torn apart the life of youth. The stricter policies and penalties from the law enforcement agency could possibly deter young people from a life of crime. The other possible solution that might work is together parents and teachers explain them about the dangers of crime and bad habits. Last but not least, we must have an efficient system so that youth could remain better informed. In conclusion, drugs and alcohol use could be primary reasons of the crime among young children. Both with the enforcement and counseling, the society could save them going astray and their precious life.
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a serious matter of concern these

days. It is heart-wrenching to
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see
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young
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people
going astray in the society. This

essay will examine the
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possible
reasons of the increased
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crime
rate among

youngsters and
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possible
solutions that could address this menace

The
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possible
reasons for the rise in the youth
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crime
could
be attributed
to drug

addiction, unemployment or troubled childhood. The principal cause, to me, is

doing
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drugs
and binge drinking among youth. It is a common sight to
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see


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teenagers
drink
excessively
, and under the influence of alcohol they lose control

and commit
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crimes
.
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, it has
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often
been witnessed
that fights break

out outside of pubs and clubs in New Delhi. Law enforcement agencies
also


opine that there is a direct connection of
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crime
with the
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drug
abuse these days.

Additionally
,
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some
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teenagers
form a nasty habit of doing
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drugs
and
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get
addicted

to it
profusely
. Their state is
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so
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bad
that in order to feed their addiction, they do

not mind committing any petty crimes.

There are ways to combat this sort of
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crime
that has torn apart the life of youth.

The stricter policies and penalties from the law enforcement agency could

possibly
deter
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young
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people
from a life of
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crime
. The other
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possible
solution that

might work is together parents and teachers
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explain
them about the
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dangers
of

crime and
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bad
habits. Last
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but
not least, we
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must
have an efficient system
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so
that

youth could remain better informed.

In conclusion
,
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drugs
and alcohol
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use
could be primary reasons of the crime

among
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young
children. Both with the enforcement and counseling, the society

could save them going astray and their precious life.
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IELTS essay Youth crime increasing rapidly in cities around world discuss give the reason and solution

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