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famous person who you admire

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I really enjoy listening to music, so I have a lot of favourite artists but the artist that I love the most is Jimin Park, who is a singer of a Korean boy band, BTS. He looks adorable in real life with short bright blonde hair and a tall slim build, which is elegant and energetic at the same time. He has the nickname “cutie, sexy, lovely” because he can pull off any style, from a cute, lovely boy to an attractive gentleman. He always brings brilliant ideas to his performance so that he would be able to provide the fans with the best performance possible. Some of his interesting ideas include performing in an inflated bubble or wearing a blindfold while dancing on stage. He is my favourite member because he’s hard working and has a caring nature. He is gifted with an amazing musical intelligence and dance skill, which means he is sensitive to rhythm. For example, he can listen to a song and dance to every single beat of that song. Another thing is that he always cares for other people, he can feel others’ pain and comfort them, which I think is also a sign of emotional intelligence. With all the fame and money that he has, he never lets those things blind him and become greedy or selfish. He still dedicates himself to work and to the fan and I think that inspires others to do the same. After all, if I could have any dream now, I’d definitely like a chance to work by his side, maybe assisting him in learning English. Imagine all the things and inspiration I can learn from him. He could show me how to manage my time and find motivation to work hard like he does every day.

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 and has a caring nature. He is gifted
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 that inspires others to do the same. After all
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, I’d definitely like a chance to work by his side, maybe assisting him in learning English. Imagine all the things and inspiration I can learn from him. He could This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
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