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Your ideas of improving your room

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My name is Ngoc Anh, but everybody calls me lazy girl. I don't like that name but maybe everyone is right. I'm a bit lazy. I have a bedroom and it's pretty messy. I think i need improve that room. There are a lot of unused cartons in the room, so I should remove them. My computer is still good but my keyboard is broken, so I need to change to a new one. My room is yellow now, but I will painted a bright color tone to make a room more spacious. Maybe is'light green one. AndI will hang a few beautiful paintings and photo on the wall. My bedroom will be more perfect and ideal if it has a green tree or flower. Because plants will help me feel relaxed and make the room always fresh. After being repaired, I hope the room would help me increase my energy to do my work in order to reach my goals. More than anything, I hope nobody will call me lazy girl anymore. Thank you for listening.
My name is
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Ngoc
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Anh
,
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but
everybody calls me lazy girl. I don't like that name
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but
maybe everyone is right. I'm a bit lazy.
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I
have a bedroom and it's pretty messy.
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I
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think
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i
need
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improve
that
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room
. There are
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a lot of
unused cartons in the
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room
,
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so
I should remove them. My computer is
still
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good
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but
my keyboard
is broken
,
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so
I need to
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change
to a new one. My
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room
is yellow
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now
,
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but
I will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "paint"
painted
a bright color tone to
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make
a
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room
more spacious. Maybe is'light green one.
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AndI
will hang a few
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beautiful
paintings and photo on the wall. My bedroom will be more perfect and ideal if it has a green tree or flower.
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Because
plants will
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help
me feel relaxed and
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make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
always fresh. After
being repaired
, I hope the
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room
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me increase my energy to do my work in order to reach my goals. More than anything, I hope nobody will call me lazy girl anymore. Thank you for listening.
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IELTS essay Your ideas of improving your room

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
177 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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