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Today, I am going to tell you a story about my old best buddy and me, who were 16 years old. What makes me refer to her as my "old-best friend"? There are many reasons to break a connection with her, but the most important issue is forgiveness. She and I were friends when we studied at primary school. We were in the same class at primary and secondary school. She saw eye to eye with me and we had many common interests. So whenever I have problems with my family or my studies or anything like that, she always stays with me, gives me more ideas to solve the problems. We had memories over the period of years. It did not change until she and I weren’t studying in the same class in high school. It impacted my relationship, so the time we spent together was less than the last. She and I also made new friends and we also have many new relationships. For the first time, we often told stories in their class and confided, but one day she told me that she had a new best friend who was a classmate with her. I'm not sure, but after that I thought we were spaced. Everyone around me can also see it. I remember that I and her friends also had problems and I needed her to help me, but instead of helping me, she chose to help her friends. I don't know why she did that? I was quite disappointed in her. Then she doesn't offer an apology or explain to me. Once again, their relationship has secrets since we gradually lose contact. After that, she had a lot of issues, but I figured she didn't need me, so I didn't contact her. At the end of tenth school, I learned that she was planning to study abroad. Despite the fact that we are no longer as close as we once were, I am sad by her decision. Today, I am going to tell you a story about my old best buddy and me, who were 16 years old. What makes me refer to her as my "old-best friend"? There are many reasons to break a connection with her, but the most important issue is forgiveness. She and I were friends when we studied at primary school. We were in the same class at primary and secondary school. She saw eye to eye with me and we had many common interests. So whenever I have problems with my family or my studies or anything like that, she always stays with me, gives me more ideas to solve the problems. We had memories over the period of years. It did not change until she and I weren’t studying in the same class in high school. It impacted my relationship, so the time we spent together was less than the last. She and I also made new friends and we also have many new relationships. For the first time, we often told stories in their class and confided, but one day she told me that she had a new best friend who was a classmate with her. I'm not sure, but after that I thought we were spaced. Everyone around me can also see it. I remember that I and her friends also had problems and I needed her to help me, but instead of helping me, she chose to help her friends. I don't know why she did that? I was quite disappointed in her. Then she doesn't offer an apology or explain to me. Once again, their relationship has secrets since we gradually lose contact. After that, she had a lot of issues, but I figured she didn't need me, so I didn't contact her. At the end of tenth school, I learned that she was planning to study abroad. Despite the fact that we are no longer as close as we once were, I am sad by her decision.
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change
until she and I weren’t studying in the same
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school
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was quite disappointed in her. Then she doesn't offer an apology or
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explain
to me.
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Once
again, their
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has secrets since we
gradually
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contact
. After that, she had
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I figured she didn't need me,
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I didn't
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her. At the
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end
of tenth
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school
, I learned that she was planning to
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study
abroad. Despite the fact that we are no longer as close as we
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once
were, I am sad by her decision.

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Today
, I am going to
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tell
you a
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story
about my
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old
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best
buddy and me,
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who
were 16 years
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old
. What
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makes
me refer to her as my
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
-best friend
Use a smart closing quote here: "”".
"
? There are
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many
reasons to break a connection with her,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the most
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important
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issue
is forgiveness. She and I were
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friends
when we studied at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
primary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. We were in the same
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
at
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primary
and secondary
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school
. She
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saw
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eye
to
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eye
with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
me and
we had
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many
common interests.
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So
whenever I have
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problems
with my family or my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
or anything like that, she always stays with me, gives me more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
to solve the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
. We had memories over the period of years. It did not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
until she and I weren’t studying in the same
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
in high
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school
. It impacted my
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relationship
,
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so
the
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time
we spent together was less than the last. She and I
also
made
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new
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friends and
we
also
have
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many
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new
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relationships
. For the
first
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time
, we
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often
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told
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stories
in their
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class
and confided,
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but
one day she
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told
me that she had a
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new
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best
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friend
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who
was a classmate with her. I'm not sure,
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but
after that I
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thought
we
were spaced
. Everyone around me can
also
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see
it. I remember that I and her
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friends
also
had
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problems
and I needed her to
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help
me,
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but
instead
of helping me, she chose to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
help
her
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
. I don't know why she did that?
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was quite disappointed in her. Then she doesn't offer an apology or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to me.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Once
again, their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
relationship
has secrets since we
gradually
lose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
contact
. After that, she had
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
issues
,
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but
I figured she didn't need me,
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so
I didn't
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contact
her. At the
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end
of tenth
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school
, I learned that she was planning to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
abroad. Despite the fact that we are no longer as close as we
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once
were, I am sad by her decision.
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IELTS essay sharing one of your interpersonal communication challenges which you have face in the past, what is the problem

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
664 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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