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I have always had a passion for planes, space crafts, astronomy and space since I was young, but I really want to become an Engineer because of my love for design, vehicles and the hardware installations inside them. So, I started searching for an Aviation Engineering major, but when I was searching I found a major in Aerospace Engineering. That is when I started listening and watching videos to people talking about information about it. While I enjoy astronomy and love to read what is related to it and learn about what is new, I did not think of studying it as a major. I consider myself a person who just loves astronomy and enjoys it. I can see the relative connection between Astronomy and Aerospace Engineering, as engineering contains subjects related to astronomy and this is one of the things that made me very interested in the major.
I have always had a passion for
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astronomy
and space since I was young,
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want to become an Engineer
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love
for design, vehicles and the hardware installations inside them.
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, I
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started
searching for an Aviation
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Engineering
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major
,
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but
when I was searching I found a
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major
in Aerospace
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Engineering
.
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when I
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started
listening and watching videos to
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people
talking about information about it.

While I enjoy
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astronomy
and
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love
to read what
is related
to it and learn about what is new, I did not
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think
of studying it as a
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major
. I consider myself a person who
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just
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loves
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astronomy
and enjoys it. I can
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see
the relative
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connection between
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Astronomy
and Aerospace
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Engineering
, as
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engineering
contains subjects related to
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astronomy
and this is one of the things that made me
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very
interested in the
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IELTS essay Your first major choice, why you are interested in

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
149 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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