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Interested about your first major choice

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I have always had a passion for aerospace crafts, astronomy and space since I was young, but I really want to become an Engineer due to the fact of my love for design, vehicles and the hardware installations inside them. consequently, I started searching for an Aviation Engineering major, but when I was searching I found a major in Aerospace Engineering. That is when’s I started listening and watching videos to people talking about information about it. While I enjoy astronomy and love to read what is related to it and learn about what is new, I did not think of studying it as a major. I consider myself a person who merely loves and enjoys it. I can see the relative connection between Astronomy and Aerospace Engineering, as engineering contains subjects related to astronomy and this is one of the things that made me supremely interested in the major.
I have always had a passion for aerospace crafts,
astronomy
and space since I was young,
but
I
really
want to become an Engineer due to the fact of my
love
for design, vehicles and the hardware installations inside them.
consequently
, I
started
searching for an Aviation
Engineering
major
,
but
when I was searching I found a
major
in Aerospace
Engineering
.
That is
when’s I
started
listening and watching videos to
people
talking about information about it.

While I enjoy
astronomy
and
love
to read what
is related
to it and learn about what is new, I did not
think
of studying it as a
major
. I consider myself a person who
merely
loves
and enjoys it. I can
see
the relative
connection between
Astronomy
and Aerospace
Engineering
, as
engineering
contains subjects related to
astronomy
and this is one of the things that made me
supremely
interested in the
major
.
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IELTS essay Interested about your first major choice

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
150 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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