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“Your first impressions when you meet someone are always right. ” v.9

“Your first impressions when you meet someone are always right. ” v. 9
Often first impressions form the basis for judging a person’s personality and background. There are two lines of thoughts when considering the significance of first impressions. I am inclined to agree that first impression is important to some extent; however, my support is in the favour of knowing the person better instead of establishing the judgments just on looks and the way of dressing as I support the more holistic way of getting to know people. To begin with, I believe that the first impression only gives just a glimpse of somebody’s character. There can be a variety of underlying factors and reasons for why the person is behaving in a particular way.   If someone, for example, is in their own world and does not initiate a conversation and does not smile in a party where it is required to mingle, it could be because maybe the person is not well enough or have a serious trouble in the family. Judging by his first impressions, that person can be easily labelled as arrogant and unfriendly. However, if someone made an effort to know the person and the reason behind being a recluse in the party, the former judgment is entirely reversed. In addition, outer appearances change and evolve but the inner personality remains the same. People who form their perception on the basis of outer fleeting appearances are often considered shallow and narrow. On the contrary, there are instances where first impressions are of foremost importance, such as in job interviews. Recruiters are specifically trained to sort potential employees just on the basis of the first impression and recruiters hope that they are right. The first impression not only includes the way of dressing, but also the way a person speaks and carries himself. To conclude, although there are instances where the first impression matters and needed to be taken into account, I strongly believe that it is always prudent to get to know a person before jumping to a conclusion.
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form the basis for judging a
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favour
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better
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of establishing the judgments
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on looks and the way of dressing as I support the more holistic way of getting to know
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people
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a glimpse of somebody’s character. There can be a variety of underlying factors and reasons for why the
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person
is behaving in a particular way.
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for example
, is in their
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world and does not initiate a conversation and does not smile
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maybe the
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is not well
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or have a serious trouble in the family. Judging by his
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impressions
, that
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can be
easily
labelled as arrogant and
unfriendly
.
However
, if someone made an effort to know the
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and the reason behind being a recluse in the party, the former judgment is
entirely
reversed.
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, outer appearances
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change
and evolve
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the inner personality remains the same.
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who form their perception on the basis of outer fleeting appearances are
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considered shallow and narrow.

On the contrary
, there are instances where
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first
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are of foremost importance, such as in job interviews. Recruiters are
specifically
trained to sort potential employees
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just
on the basis of the
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first
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impression
and recruiters hope that they are right. The
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not
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includes the way of dressing,
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also
the way a
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speaks and carries himself.

To conclude
, although there are instances where the
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impression
matters and needed to
be taken
into account, I
strongly
believe that it is always prudent to
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to know a
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before
jumping to a conclusion.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay “Your first impressions when you meet someone are always right. ” v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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