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You have been working in an international company in abroad. Now you are going back to home country without informing your office friends. Write an apology letter to these friends. In the letter, you should: •apologies to your friends•explain why you ar v.1

You have been working in an international company in abroad. Now you are going back to home country without informing your office friends. Write an apology letter to these friends. In the letter, you should: •apologies to your friends•explain why you ar v. 1
For the time being libraries have been decreasing their role in our life because computers, especially the internet, have almost all whatever people want. Therefore, society thinks more rational close such constructions. However, in my opinion, public libraries as popular as the computer search, and with small modernising a society can get benefit from it. Since, many public libraries have ancient books that still not are digitised, therefore people inevitably go there for such information. Moreover, gathering information from books enhance an analytical quality of students. Besides, many libraries provide different services for customers, even some have computers and printers for easier searching and printing the information. Furthermore, students in libraries have some type of communication with each other, and they can ask librarians about help with an aiming search for information. For example, pupils can work with one book that help communication and kind of break some barrier between them or find like-minding people when rent the books that will create friendship later. However, society cannot decline one fact that the computer devices allowed to get all information from home, and throughout the time are increasing quantity books that are digitised. Therefore, such type search of information provides benefits for people who want to do it at home. Moreover, presently crime level is increasing, therefore parents bother about safety their children and not allowed them to go to a library. For example, a lot of the crime news says that perpetrators such as paedophiles wait children near educational establishments. To conclude, I believe that libraries, even as a memory about the past, should leave. Moreover, the government could spend money for enhancing security level and addition services inside it. Besides, implement some computers part in public libraries allowed attracting more people and will finish a debates the necessary libraries.
For the time being libraries have been decreasing their role in our life
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
computers,
especially
the internet, have almost all whatever
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
want.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Therefore
, society
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thinks
more rational close such constructions.
However
, in my opinion, public libraries as popular as the computer search, and with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
Possible spelling mistake. 'modernising' is British English.
modernising
a society can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
benefit from it.

Since,
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many
public libraries have ancient
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
that
still
not are
Possible spelling mistake. 'digitised' is British English.
digitised
,
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therefore
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
inevitably
go there for such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
.
Moreover
, gathering
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information
from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
enhance an analytical quality of students.
Besides
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
libraries provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
services for customers, even
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
have computers and printers for easier searching and printing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
.
Furthermore
, students in libraries have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
type of communication with each other, and they can ask librarians about
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
with an aiming search for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
.
For example
, pupils can work with one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
communication and kind of break
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
barrier between them or find like-minding
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
when rent the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
that will create friendship later.

However
, society cannot decline one fact that the computer devices
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
from home, and throughout the time are increasing quantity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
that are
Possible spelling mistake. 'digitised' is British English.
digitised
.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Therefore
, such type search of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
information
provides benefits for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who want to do it at home.
Moreover
,
presently
crime level is increasing,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
therefore
parents bother about safety their children and not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
them to go to a library.
For example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
the crime news says that perpetrators such as
Possible spelling mistake. 'paedophiles' is British English.
paedophiles
wait children near educational establishments.

To conclude
, I believe that libraries, even as a memory about the past, should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
.
Moreover
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
could spend money for enhancing security level and addition services inside it.
Besides
, implement
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
computers part in public libraries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
attracting more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and will finish
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a debate" or simply "debates"?
a debates
the necessary libraries.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have been working in an international company in abroad. Now you are going back to home country without informing your office friends. Write an apology letter to these friends. In the letter, you should: •apologies to your friends•explain why you ar v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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