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Young People These Days Tend To Be Less Polite And show less respect than previous generations. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem.

Young People These Days Tend To Be Less Polite And show less respect than previous generations. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem. D1Gm
In this 21st century people nowadays are so ambitious and enthusatic that they have become less polite and even show less respect as compared to previous generations. There are two major reasons behind this problem. All will be discussed in the course of this essay along with the possible solutions that can be taken to deal with this issue prior to reaching conclusion. One of the major reasons that young individuals are less polite and are not showing respect is due to fact that their is less parental supervision. Parents are so busy because of their hectic schedule that they are not able to focus of their child growth. In other words, parents are so focus on giving better lifestyle to their children that they are actually forgetting to take care of child behaviour. Secondly, youngsters are having less patience level. When someone tries to tell them that this task can be done in distinct ways they become so rude that they even do not know what they are saying. In order to deal with this problem certain steps needs to be taken. Firstly, parents should start giving time to their children so that they can focus on their child behaviour and they should also see what there little on are watching and learning because in today's time watching movies all the time is not so good as they are using valgour content which children implements in their life. Another recommended solution can be they should start listening to others as grownups have more experience in their life which will actually help then to fight with the situations. To reiterate, undoubtedly, young people are behaving in a disrespectful manner because of having no control and showing no guidance to them, however, this issue still can be resolved if elders start giving sometime and teaching them.
In this 21st century
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people
nowadays are
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so
ambitious and
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enthusatic
that they have become
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less
polite and even
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show
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less
respect as compared to previous generations. There are two major reasons behind this problem. All will
be discussed
in the course of this essay along with the possible solutions that can
be taken
to deal with this issue prior to reaching conclusion.

One of the major reasons that young individuals are
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less
polite and are not showing respect is due to fact that
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their
is
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less
parental supervision. Parents are
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so
busy
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because
of their hectic schedule that they are not able to focus of their child growth.
In other words
, parents are
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so
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focus
on giving better lifestyle to their children that they are actually forgetting to take care of child
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behaviour
.
Secondly
, youngsters are having
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less
patience level.
“When” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
When
someone tries to
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tell
them that this task can
be done
in distinct ways they become
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so
rude that they even do not know what they are saying.

In order to deal with this problem certain steps needs to
be taken
.
Firstly
, parents should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
giving time to their children
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so
that they can focus on their child
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
behaviour and
they should
also
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see
what there
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little
on are watching and learning
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because
in
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today
's time watching movies all the time is not
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so
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good
as they are using
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valgour
content which children
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implements
in their life. Another recommended solution can be they should
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start
listening to others as grownups have more experience in their life which will actually
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help
then to fight with the situations.

To reiterate,
undoubtedly
, young
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people
are behaving
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in a disrespectful manner
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because
of having no control and showing no guidance to them,
however
, this issue
still
can
be resolved
if elders
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
giving sometime and teaching them.
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IELTS essay Young People These Days Tend To Be Less Polite And show less respect than previous generations. Why do you think this is? What can be done to solve this problem.

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4 paragraphs
305 words
6.0
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