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Young generation think that shoping is lesuire time activity but other think that shopping not only just leisure activitie

Young generation think that shoping is lesuire time activity but other think that shopping not only just leisure activitie W8XAN
In the current day of the situation, there is no doubt that shopping has become an important part youngsterlife. This phenomenon is offering multifarious benefits as well. However, sometimes bunch of problems emerge due to the same. To begin with there are some valid reason for escalated pastime shoping. First of all trendyFashion accesories has draa youngsters attention. updating themselves, there are several number. of nearly launched products have purche young customer. This only attributed to their. shopaholic natcule with large money. Furthermore the disposable money in the hands of fortune youngsters, encourage them spend it an shopping. which influance their peers to do the same. On the flip side at the coin, shopping only is not lesuire activity there are more crucial activity to improve the skill set of young people. they can spend their precious time in physical and mental activities as well as reading to improve their reading skill. For example according physical acivity they can play a various sports in their leisure time also they can exercise because of that youngsters stay fit and Healthy For mental activity they performe meditation to stay positive for their studies. to conclude, the young era are influced in shopping as part of their leisure, however they could shun it by doing after beneficial pastime activities. I strongly believe that parents should be taught their children to selective about their hobbies that could assit them in future.
In the
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current
day of the situation, there is no doubt that
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shopping
has become an
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important
part
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youngsterlife
. This phenomenon is offering multifarious benefits
as well
.
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,
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sometimes
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bunch of
problems emerge due to the same.

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begin
with there are
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some
valid reason for escalated
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pastime shoping
.
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trendyFashion
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accesories
has
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draa
youngsters attention.
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updating
themselves, there are several number.
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of
nearly
launched products have
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purche
young customer. This
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attributed to their.
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shopaholic
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natcule
with large money.
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Furthermore
the disposable money in the hands of fortune youngsters, encourage them spend it
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an
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shopping
.
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which
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influance
their peers to do the same.

On the flip side at the coin,
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shopping
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only
is not
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lesuire
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activity
there are more crucial
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activity
to
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improve
the
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skill
set of young
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people
.
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they
can spend their precious time in physical and mental
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activities
as well
as reading to
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improve
their reading
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skill
.
For example
according physical
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acivity
they can play a various
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sports
in their leisure time
also
they can exercise
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because
of that youngsters stay fit and Healthy For mental
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activity
they
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performe
meditation to stay
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positive
for their studies.

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to
conclude, the young era are
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influced
in
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shopping
as part of their leisure,
however
they could shun it by doing after beneficial pastime
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activities
. I
strongly
believe that parents should
be taught
their children to selective about their hobbies that could
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assit
them
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in future
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IELTS essay Young generation think that shoping is lesuire time activity but other think that shopping not only just leisure activitie

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