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Young drivers should be supervised by their parents for at least a year

Young drivers should be supervised by their parents for at least a year 8LylB
Getting a drivers’ license at a young age and driving a car is becoming more common nowadays. Parents noParents are no longer have to drive the car for young people to where their kids want to go. On the other hand, young people need to take responsibility and risks for their own sake if accidents happenhappened. In the learning state, parents or instructors should supervise and teach the young people how to drive, read the road signs and rules of the road. Young drivers can get help from parents and instructors if they facefaced accidents like crushing the car or the tire is blown. They can also gain trust from their parents in the future because the parents alreadyparents have already know how capablemuch they are capable. But for the young people, as they already got the drivers’ license, and they may not feel independent in the future if their parents or instructors are not supervising them anymore. There are some parents who don’t have enough time to supervise their kids. Parents can also get annoyed gradually because they are not free the whole time. To summarize, I think young people should not be supervised by their parents for at least a year because they will always need to be supervised by their parents the whole time.
Getting a drivers’ license at a
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age and driving a car is becoming more common nowadays.
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Parents
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noParents
are no longer
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have to
drive the car for
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young
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people
to where their kids want to go.
On the other hand
,
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young
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people
need to take responsibility and
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risks
for their
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own
sake if accidents
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happenhappened
.

In the learning state,
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parents
or instructors should supervise and teach the
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young
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people
how to drive, read the road signs and
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rules
of the road.
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Young
drivers can
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get
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help
from
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parents
and instructors if they
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facefaced
accidents like crushing the car or the tire
is blown
. They can
also
gain trust from their
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parents
in the future
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because
the
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parents
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alreadyparents
have already
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know
how
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capablemuch
they are capable.

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for the
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young
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people
, as they already
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got
the drivers’ license, and they may not feel independent in the future if their
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parents
or instructors are not supervising them anymore. There are
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some
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parents
who don’t have
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enough
time to supervise their kids.
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can
also
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get
annoyed
gradually
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because
they are not free the whole time.

To summarize
, I
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think
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young
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people
should not
be supervised
by their
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parents
for at least a year
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because
they will always need to
be supervised
by their
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parents
the whole time.
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IELTS essay Young drivers should be supervised by their parents for at least a year

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
217 words
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