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Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than the previous generation. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development?

Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than the previous generation. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development? kY5YW
An increasing number of couples prefer to have one or two children in comparison with the generation from last many decades. Almost all couples are in favour to fulfil other other goals in their life. However, in my opinion, it is a positive development as not only parents can easily focus on their child’s academic and physical growth but also they can spend quality time with the children. One positive trend arise from young couples is that they are opting for less children from long time. On the one hand, this help parents to pay more attention on their kids academic and physical activities. In other words, every individual is busy in completing their routine work especially womens who are not only completing their jobs or business activities but managing their jobs or business. As a consequence, they were not able to spend their time with children which affects their academic and physical development whereas parents who are engaged with their kids are more intelligent and active. To illustrate this, a study conducted by a scientist of China in the last year shows that children who are intelligent and fit is because of their parents who stayed alert and focused. Second positive development is spending time with their kids which is good for their growth as well as will help kids to learn their culture. Morever, this will strenthen the bond between parents and children. As a result both of them can easily understand each other without any efforts. For example, a recent article in magazine wrote by one of the student from JIMS University of Delhi which says more than half of the population who spend quality time with each other are more likely to have better understanding. In conclusion, young couplesare in the favour pf having maximum 2 kids. Hence, it has several positive developments such as helps in raising child’s physical and academic growth but also give chance to spend their quality time with eachother.
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decades. Almost all couples are in
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to fulfil
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other
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other
goals in their life.
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positive
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development
as not
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only
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parents
can
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focus on their child’s
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academic
and
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physical
growth
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but
also
they can
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spend
quality
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time
with the
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children
. One
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positive
trend arise from young couples is that they are opting for
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less
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children
from long
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time
. On the one hand, this
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help
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parents
to pay more attention on their
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kids
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academic
and
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physical
activities. In
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other
words, every individual is busy in completing their routine work
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womens
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who
are not
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only
completing their jobs or business activities
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but
managing their jobs or business. As a consequence, they were not able to
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spend
their
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time
with
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children
which affects their
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academic
and
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physical
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development
whereas
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parents
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who
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with their
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kids
are more intelligent and active. To illustrate this, a study conducted by a scientist of China in the last year
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shows
that
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children
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who
are intelligent and fit is
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because
of their
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parents
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who
stayed alert and focused. Second
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positive
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development
is spending
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time
with their
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kids
which is
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good
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help
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kids
to learn their culture.
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, this will
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the bond between
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parents
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children
.
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without any efforts.
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, a recent article in magazine wrote by one of the student from
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JIMS
University of Delhi which says more than half of the population
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who
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spend
quality
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time
with each
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are more likely to have better understanding.
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, young
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in the
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favour
pf having maximum 2
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kids
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positive
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developments
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helps
in raising child’s
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physical
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academic
growth
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but
also
give chance to
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spend
their quality
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time
with
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eachother
.
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IELTS essay Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than the previous generation. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development?

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