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Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than previous generations. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development?

Apparently, the youngsters couples' preference is to have fewer number of offsprings than ever before. countless of them take priority over achieving other aims first than having child. However, in my opinion, the advantages of this interpretations are more than drawbacks. To begin with, to compare past with now nurturing few children has more benefits. Firstly, parents would afford to their children's needs. If a huge amount of offsprings' demand become true, they will be more satisfied. For instance, educational expenses, especially managing tuition fees of their universities. This would be crucially important for the youngsters' educational development. Secondly, the well-being of the child living in families with fewer members might be more than large families. Probably, parents are of morw time to allicate affection to their children. such as playing games, going to museum parks and so on. So, the mental problems become less and less. Accomplishing their goals initial before becoming parents has two merits. The first compelling reason is that they become committed to their households. That is, if they are able to gain most of the goals set for themselves before, they will provide their child with more attention. Take recruiting a tutor as an example; this person having ability to discover child's talents and nurture them. This can contribute to launch children on the path of knowing their interests effectively. Another justification is that the level of tention become less among family members. To put it differently, the more the later adults' targets be achieved the less conflict exist between parent and child. Hence, child are highly unlikely to rebel against their parent, so the amount of stress become nearly none. In conclusion, I am of the opion that having fewer offsprings and achieving goals before giving a child birth have positive enhancement. Due to the fact that more child's desire be fulfiled and parents will become more dedicated to their own family.
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, the youngsters couples' preference is to have fewer number of offsprings than ever
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.
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of them take priority over achieving other aims
first
than having
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child
.
However
, in my opinion, the advantages of
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interpretations are more than drawbacks.

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with, to compare past with
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now
nurturing few children has more benefits.
Firstly
,
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parents
would afford to their children's needs. If a huge amount of offsprings' demand
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become
true, they will be more satisfied.
For instance
, educational expenses,
especially
managing tuition fees of their universities. This would be
crucially
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important
for the youngsters' educational development.
Secondly
, the well-being of the
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child
living in
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families
with fewer members might be more than large
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families
.
Probably
,
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parents
are of
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morw
time to
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allicate
affection to their children.
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such
as playing games, going to museum parks and
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on.
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, the mental problems
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become
less and less.

Accomplishing their goals initial
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before
becoming
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parents
has two merits. The
first
compelling reason is that they
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become
committed to their households.
That is
, if they are able to gain most of the goals set for themselves
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before
, they will provide their
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child
with more attention. Take recruiting a tutor as an example; this person having ability to discover child's talents and nurture them. This can contribute to launch children on the path of knowing their interests
effectively
. Another justification is that the level of
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tention
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become
less among
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family
members. To put it
differently
, the more the later adults' targets
be achieved
the less conflict exist between
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parent
and
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child
.
Hence
,
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child
are
highly
unlikely to rebel against their
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parent
,
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so
the amount of
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stress
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become
nearly
none.

In conclusion
, I am of the
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opion
that having fewer offsprings and achieving goals
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before
giving a
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child birth
have
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positive
enhancement. Due to the fact that more child's desire be
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fulfiled
and
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parents
will
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become
more dedicated to their
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own
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family
.

IELTS essay Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than previous generations. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development?

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