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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Over the past few decades world has facing a vital trouble of environmental problems. After the development of industrial era that problem has grown fast via the world. The causes of environmental now hit the high level and t has become a global problem. In the industrial revolution is the main competition among the development countries. They tring to show theirs powers to the world. The most of scientists have searched and measured fly to the moon and other planets and they produce various of machine for achive their targets. But unfortunately they have already missed the think about how to protect our planet and it environmental situation. This happening most threat to the particular species of plants and especially for the important animals. For example, recently in Australia thousand of whales are came to the seashore. The reason is high powered naval redar has took problems for whales lifestyles and it they could not live in the deep sea they coulld not share theirs waves under the water because of this redar. Finally, the result is thousand of whales dead on the seashore. The second thing is usage of fertilizer in to the agricultural fields has caused to the important insects that most helpful to the farmers and theirs harvest. If some farmers use high amount of toxic fertilizers, the result is loss of the various important insects. On the other hand, environmental problem has threatened to the biodiversity, especially to the particular plants. It may be harmful to the medical plants as well as big trees of protect the balance of oxygen and also ventilation. Fothermore, air pollution, water pollution are becoming more dangerous situation to the environment. For instance, without trees the temporature increase highly and it threat to the ice glaziers and it started to the melting and flooding in to the lands. As well as air pollution make some effectness disease like virul, fungus and bacteria. My opinion is, we want developed the world but we have to think how to devoloped it eco- friendly and rethink what happened in the past. Then we could save our plant, animals and also air and water for make a better environmental situation.
Over the past few decades
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has facing a vital trouble of
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environmental
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problems
.
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has grown
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world
. The causes of
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environmental
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now
hit the high level and t has become a global problem.

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tring
to
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show
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theirs
powers to the
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world
. The
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most of scientists
have searched and measured
fly
to the moon and other
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planets and
they produce various of machine for
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achive
their targets.
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unfortunately they have already missed the
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think
about how to protect our planet and
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it
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environmental
situation. This happening most threat to the particular species of
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plants
and
especially
for the
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important
animals.
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, recently in Australia
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thousand
of whales are
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came
to the seashore. The reason is
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high powered
naval
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redar
has
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took
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problems
for whales lifestyles and it they could not
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live
in the deep sea they
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coulld
not share
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theirs
waves under the water
because of this
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redar
.
Finally
, the result is
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thousand
of whales dead on the seashore. The second thing is usage of fertilizer in to the agricultural fields has caused to the
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important
insects that most helpful to the farmers and
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theirs
harvest. If
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some
farmers
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use
high amount of toxic fertilizers, the result is loss of the various
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important
insects.

On the other hand
,
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environmental
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problem
has threatened to the biodiversity,
especially
to the particular
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plants
. It may be harmful to the medical
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plants
as well
as
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big
trees of protect the balance of oxygen and
also
ventilation.

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, air pollution, water pollution are becoming more
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dangerous
situation to the environment.
For instance
, without trees the
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temporature
increase
highly
and
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it threat
to the ice
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glaziers and
it
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started
to the melting and flooding in to the lands.
As well
as air pollution
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make
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some
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effectness
disease like
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virul
, fungus and bacteria.

My opinion is, we want developed the
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world
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but
we
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have to
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think
how to
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devoloped
it eco- friendly and rethink what happened in the past. Then we could save our
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plant
, animals and
also
air and water for
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make
a better
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environmental
situation.

IELTS essay Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

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