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The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

These days there a lot of moving in our world and from that moving to cities from countryside. So, some people think that is good especially who moves to city. While other believe that will cause bigger poplation in cities and more enviroment problems. I will discuss the both sides in this essay and draw my personal concluion. In one hand, they say that they will have better public services like hospitals, schools, universities, etc. And this have a true side because the public services usually be weaker at the countryside than city. For example, I visit the countryside in Morocco and I do not see any university near there. That make university students move to city in order to keep thier budget for longer time. So that why some think that is good to move to city. On the other hand, some say that will make cities bigger and bigger, so this have an awful effect on destroyed the farming sector, forsts and farms. To illustrate, remove farms and build, instead of it, some apartments or houses because the city gets bigger and bigger that will have an effect on air pollution and climate change will be faster because we remove one of the Earth's lugs. Hence the belief that we should not allow to movement to city. In addition, we may have a lake of workers in countryside and then will have a lake in farming products and maybe then we will have to import this products. To an instance, if there no workers in countryside that mean no people work there and no farming products like vegtables, fruits, milk, etc. And another problems more people does not work in city and that have an tragitic effect on economy. This clearly proves that we can not take that easy. After a careful analysis of both point views, I believe we can not let all prople in countryside to move to city. But we can improve public services in countryside to solve this problem and stop that panic movement.
These days there
a lot of
moving in our world and from that moving to
cities
from
countryside
.
So
,
some
people
think
that is
good
especially
who
moves
to city. While other believe that will cause
bigger
poplation
in
cities
and more
enviroment
problems. I will discuss the both sides in this essay and draw my personal
concluion
.

In one hand, they say that they will have better public services like hospitals, schools, universities, etc. And
this have
a true side
because
the public services
usually
be weaker at the
countryside
than city.
For example
, I visit the
countryside
in Morocco and I do not
see
any university near there. That
make
university students
move
to city in order to
keep
thier
budget for longer time.
So
that why
some
think
that is
good
to
move
to city.

On the other hand
,
some
say that will
make
cities
bigger
and
bigger
,
so
this have
an awful effect on
destroyed
the farming sector,
forsts
and farms. To illustrate, remove farms and build,
instead
of it,
some
apartments or
houses
because
the city
gets
bigger
and
bigger
that will have an effect on air pollution and climate
change
will be faster
because
we remove one of the Earth's lugs.
Hence
the belief that we should not
allow
to movement to city.

In addition
, we may have a lake of workers in
countryside
and then will have a lake in farming products and maybe then we will
have to
import
this
products. To an instance, if
there no
workers in
countryside
that mean no
people
work there and no farming products like
vegtables
, fruits, milk, etc. And another problems more
people
does
not work in city and that have
an
tragitic
effect on economy. This
clearly
proves that we can not take that easy.

After a careful analysis of both point views, I believe we can not
let
all
prople
in
countryside
to
move
to city.
But
we can
improve
public services in
countryside
to solve this problem and
stop
that panic movement.
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IELTS essay The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed

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  American English
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340 words
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