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Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than previous generations. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development.

Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than previous generations. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development. 2DkX
In the modern era, the majority of youngsters tend to prioritise other achievements in their life over becoming parents to a bunch of babies, in comparison to the older generations. In my opinion, this is a positive development, as with young people focusing more on their goals is making them independent and skilful. Moreover, they are not contributing unnecessarily towards the population growth. This essay will discuss these points in detail with relevant examples. Being goal-oriented has become one of the trends in recent times, as with achieving their aspirations, the younger generation joyfully enjoys their life in a luxurious way. Their passion towards achieving their milestone is what makes their family proud as well as it proves fruitful to the growth of the country. To exemplify, it is observed that many young people dream of becoming an entrepreneur, unlike the older generation's idea of getting married at a young age and having children. Today’s generation withstands the thought of providing top class facilities to their children, and so believe in the idea of having less children. Thus, with this perspective they are able to invest their time and energy on them only. Besides this, the younger generation is well aware of the fact of increasing population on the daily basis and, hence, doesn’t neglect this issue. Furthermore, youngsters care about this issue and find ways to resolve it by working closely with government organizations to teach the ways to control the growing population. Additionally, they understand that having more children will put a burden on the society as well as on themselves. Therefore, avoid to agree with the opinions of older generations. In conclusion, it can be stated that having less children and focusing more on achieving life goals is a positive development, as with this the young parents are able to provide all the best facilities to the limited number of children only and even harming the population growth.
In the modern era, the majority of youngsters tend to
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prioritise
other achievements in their life over becoming parents to a bunch of babies,
in comparison
to the older generations. In my opinion, this is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development, as with
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young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
focusing more on their goals is making them independent and
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skilful
.
Moreover
, they are not contributing
unnecessarily
towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
growth. This essay will discuss these points in detail with relevant examples.

Being goal-oriented has become one of the trends in recent times, as with achieving their aspirations, the younger generation
joyfully
enjoys their life
Consider replacing "in a luxurious way" with the adverb for "luxurious"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a luxurious way
. Their passion towards achieving their milestone is what
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
their family proud
as well
as it proves fruitful to the growth of the country. To exemplify, it
is observed
that
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many
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young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
dream of becoming an entrepreneur, unlike the older generation's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of getting married at a
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young
age and
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having
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children
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Today
’s generation withstands the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
of providing top
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
facilities to their
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children
, and
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so
believe in the
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idea
of
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having
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less
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children
.
Thus
, with this perspective they are able to invest their time and energy on them
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
.

Besides
this, the younger generation is well aware of the fact of increasing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
on the daily basis and,
hence
, doesn’t neglect this issue.
Furthermore
, youngsters care about this issue and find ways to resolve it by working
closely
with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
organizations to teach the ways to control the growing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
.
Additionally
, they understand that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
having
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
will put a burden on the society
as well
as on themselves.
Therefore
, avoid to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the opinions of older generations.

In conclusion
, it can
be stated
that
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having
Did you mean "fewer"? The noun children is countable.
less
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children
and focusing more on achieving life goals is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
development, as with this the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
young
parents are able to provide all the best facilities to the limited number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
and even harming the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
growth.
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IELTS essay Young couples nowadays prefer to have fewer children than previous generations. Most of them prefer to accomplish other goals in their life first. Is this a positive or negative development.

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