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Young adults and unpaid community work are advantages more than disadvantages

Young adults and unpaid community work are advantages more than disadvantages Rk15G

We all know how enthusiastic the young youth nowadays. They also aware about their study as well as the community where they are living. Volunteering work for community is now immensely common in each and every society. However, the unpaid community work is crucial for the adults. There are more disadvantages over the advantages. I am going to talk about In to the below paragraphs. To commence with, I discuss some of the disadvantages first with appropriate elaboration. young adults have vital role to perform. like responsibility of family, study, golden future and many more. At a early age they have to focus on their studies rather then such kind of unpaid work. In addition, teenagers are fond of earning at the early age consequently, they do necessary efforts for achieving the jobs. If they are vitally engaged in the community work they can’t able to focus on their career. The second principle disadvantage is time which is extremely important for every human being “time is money “ consequently they have to take the proper steps of the ladder towards the bright future. To illustrate, pupils who want to study in foreign country he/she should attend the school, extra tuition, assiengmnet work and much more if they focus on the voluntary work, it would effect supremely adverse effect on their career pathway. There are few advantage also by doing voluntary work some adults could came to know some moral values. They have chance to meet the culture and also learn some ethical values. To sum up, I pen down saying that, adults and community work both are the essential part of any culture however, there are more disadvantages over the advantages therefore the adults should focus on the career.

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