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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words. v.22

: The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions. v. 22
Teenage is the most vulnerable age for not only the positive and but also the negative thoughts to incur. Recent criminal records from different countries show the rise in crime rate among teenagers. Teenagers with less guidance are easily dragged into these crimes. One of the reasons in an increase in the crime rate among teenagers is less interaction with their parents. Mostly, in a nuclear family, where both the parents are working, children hardly get time to discuss their problem with them. This results in an increase in boredom and taking advice from such people who already indulge in criminal activities. Another reason could be excessive exposure to social media and getting attracted to the T. V. Programs showing vicious criminal activities. Nowadays, teenagers are picking negative characters shown in movies as their role model. They try to copy their role model and eventually get trapped into one of such crimes. Society and friends are equally responsible for a drastic increase in teenage crime. Teenage with good friend circle and better society possesses good social values and indulge less in criminal activities. On the contrary, a friend indulged in a sin can easily drag another friend and it has been noticed in my own society that few teenagers have started smoking on the terrace with two outsiders. The society and the government bodies can work together to curb the increased crime rate among teenagers. People should take it as their moral responsibility to inform the concerned parents, if they suspect their child in some criminal activities. Government should take initiative to create awareness among teenagers about the strict law and the impact of these activities in their future. Nevertheless, parents are busy with their daily routine, they should take some time to sit and talk to their children about their friends, daily routine and guide them with their experience. In addition to this, parents should share stories about other teenagers who unknowingly indulged in some criminal activities and their fate. Though, being most vulnerable age, teenage is also the age to excel and set up the foundation for successful and prosperous life. Parents are the strong force behind any child and they can teach social values to their children at the appropriate age. Lastly, efforts put together by both parents and government can put a control over drastically increasing teenage crimes all over the world.
Teenage is the most vulnerable
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age
for not
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only
the
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positive
and
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but
also
the
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negative
thoughts to incur. Recent
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criminal
records from
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different
countries
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show
the rise in
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crime
rate among
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teenagers
.
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Teenagers
with less guidance are
easily
dragged into these crimes.

One of the reasons in an increase in the
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crime
rate among
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teenagers
is less interaction with their
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parents
.
Mostly
, in a nuclear family, where both the
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parents
are working, children hardly
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get
time to discuss their problem with them. This results in an increase in boredom and taking advice from such
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people
who already indulge in
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criminal
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activities
. Another reason could be excessive exposure to social media and getting attracted to the T. V. Programs showing vicious
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criminal
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activities
. Nowadays,
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teenagers
are picking
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negative
characters shown in movies as their role model. They try to copy their role model and
eventually
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get
trapped into one of such crimes.

Society and
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friends
are
equally
responsible for a drastic increase in teenage
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crime
. Teenage with
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good
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friend
circle and better society possesses
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good
social values and indulge less in
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criminal
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activities
.
On the contrary
, a
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friend
indulged in a sin can
easily
drag another
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friend
and it has
been noticed
in my
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own
society that few
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teenagers
have
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started
smoking on the terrace with two outsiders.

The society and the
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government
bodies can work together to curb the increased
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crime
rate among
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teenagers
.
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People
should take it as their moral responsibility to inform the concerned
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parents
, if they suspect their child in
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some
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criminal
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activities
.
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Government
should take initiative to create awareness among
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teenagers
about the strict law and the impact of these
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activities
in their future.
Nevertheless
,
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parents
are busy with their daily routine, they should take
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some
time to sit and talk to their children about their
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friends
, daily routine and guide them with their experience.
In addition
to this,
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parents
should share stories about other
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teenagers
who
unknowingly
indulged in
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some
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criminal
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activities
and their fate.

Though, being
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most
vulnerable
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age
, teenage is
also
the
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age
to excel and set up the foundation for successful and prosperous life.
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Parents
are the strong force behind any
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child and
they can teach social values to their children at the appropriate
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age
.
Lastly
, efforts put together by both
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parents
and
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government
can put a control over
drastically
increasing teenage
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crimes
all over the world.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay : The crime rate among teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions. v. 22

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
396 words
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