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you have spent you last weekend with your friend and has lost watch write a letter to you friend 1 Thanking him her for last weekend 2 describe your watch 3 What will he she do with it v.1

you have spent you last weekend with your friend and has lost watch write a letter to you friend 1 Thanking him her for last weekend 2 describe your watch 3 What will he she do with it v. 1
In this day and age, travelling around the world is not just a dream because of the invention of transportation. Although we can go anywhere and anytime by using convenient transportation, it brings severe effects that are harmful to the environment and consumption of natural resources. Hence, some people support that governments should promote the use of bicycle while others believe that investing on public transportation systems is the best way to solve the problem. First of all, public transport allows many people to travel in just one vehicle, which helps reduce traffic congestion in city centres. According to the reports, the total CO2 emissions from buses (15%) was three times lower than the private cars. It is obvious that there are environmental benefits of most of the people using one vehicle in the form of a reduction in the consumption of fossil fuels. In addition, some public transport such as subways, are highly energy efficient or use sustainable energy which is greatly reduced the destruction towards the environment. From another perspective, bicycles can solve the problem that public transport can't handle it, which is offering flexible routes. We always face some troubles when we use the public transport such as buses are not catered for many destination and the punctuality of buses or trains is frequently unreliable. Furthermore, we will not be restricted by other passengers as bicycles can be deemed the personal transport. If we use the bicycles, we can avoid the peak hours and will not feel unpleasant due to the overcrowding. In conclusion, we have the responsibilities to protect our environment, either using bicycle or riding public transportation is less harmful to the environment. In order to live in healthy and clean cities, we must practice the carpooling as soon as possible.
In this day and age, travelling around the world is not
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just
a dream
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because
of the invention of
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transportation
. Although we can go anywhere and anytime by using convenient
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transportation
, it brings severe effects that are harmful to the environment and consumption of natural resources.
Hence
,
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some
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people
support that
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governments
should promote the
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use
of
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bicycle
while others believe that investing on
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public
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transportation
systems is the best way to solve the problem.

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First of all
,
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public
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transport
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allows
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many
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people
to travel in
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just
one vehicle, which
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helps
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reduce
traffic congestion in city
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centres
. According to the reports, the total CO2 emissions from buses (15%) was three times lower than the private cars. It is obvious that there are environmental benefits of most of the
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people
using one vehicle in the form of a reduction in the consumption of fossil fuels.
In addition
,
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some
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public
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transport
such as subways, are
highly
energy efficient or
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use
sustainable energy which is
greatly
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reduced
the destruction towards the environment.

From another perspective,
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bicycles
can solve the problem that
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public
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transport
can't handle it, which is offering flexible routes. We always face
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some
troubles when we
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use
the
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public
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transport
such as buses are not catered for
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many destination
and the punctuality of buses or trains is
frequently
unreliable.
Furthermore
, we will not
be restricted
by other passengers as
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bicycles
can
be deemed
the personal
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transport
. If we
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use
the
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bicycles
, we can avoid the peak hours and will not feel unpleasant due to the overcrowding.

In conclusion
, we have the responsibilities to protect our environment, either using
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bicycle
or riding
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public
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
transportation
is less harmful to the environment. In order to
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live
in healthy and clean cities, we
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must
practice the carpooling as
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soon
as possible.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay you have spent you last weekend with your friend and has lost watch write a letter to you friend 1 Thanking him her for last weekend 2 describe your watch 3 What will he she do with it v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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