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You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your experience. tell him why you are interested in the job. say why you think you would be suitable for the v.1

You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your experience. tell him why you are interested in the job. say why you think you would be suitable for the v. 1
People have different views about the effectiveness of the traditional written test. While there are several modules that should not be accessed by this formal exam, I still believe that it should not be replaced completely. The traditional written test is a very common way to access the educational achievements due to its convenience. Firstly, it can be conducted in a short time to examine a large number of students. Secondly, it has many types of questions to test different kinds of knowledge and skills in students, namely multiple choice, short answers, reports, thesis or long essays. That is also a reason why the written test can be used for both theoretical and practical modules. Finally, as long as the written examination still exists, the handwriting, which is the skill that is necessary for all time, will never be lost in the technology world. On the other hand, the formal “paper and pen” test is not the best way to examine student’s skills in some courses. For example, in language courses, speaking is the skills that need to be accessed orally. A student can write a good essay in new language does not mean that he/she can speak it fluently. Similarly, for some mini-research projects that are related to business, social science and art, beside a written final report, a presentation will be the most suitable test for teachers to check not only their students’ knowledge, but also other soft-skills like public speaking, organizing, presenting and even teamwork. Furthermore, examiners can access the student’s abilities by different tailored practical coursework. This is by far the most suitable method to know whether the students are able to understand and transfer their knowledge to practice. To conclude, the type of examinations should be depended on the nature of the educational programs’ curriculum. However, I still think that the written test is the most common and effective method for all educational organizations.
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views about the effectiveness of the traditional
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test
. While there are several modules that should not
be accessed
by this formal exam, I
still
believe that it should not
be replaced
completely.

The traditional
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written
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test
is a
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very
common way to access the educational achievements due to its convenience.
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in a short time to examine
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.
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types of questions to
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test
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different
kinds of knowledge and
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skills
in
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,
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multiple choice, short answers, reports, thesis or long essays.
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a reason why the
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written
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test
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used
for both theoretical and practical modules.
Finally
, as long as the
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written
examination
still
exists, the handwriting, which is the
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skill
that is
necessary for all time, will never
be lost
in the technology world.

On the other hand
, the formal “paper and pen”
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test
is not the best way to examine
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student
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good
essay in new language does not mean that he/she can speak it
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.
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some
mini-research projects that
are related
to business, social science and art, beside a
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written
final report, a presentation will be the most suitable
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test
for teachers to
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skills
like public speaking, organizing, presenting and even teamwork.
Furthermore
, examiners can access the
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student’s
abilities by
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different
tailored practical coursework. This is by far the most suitable method to know whether the
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students
are able to understand and transfer their knowledge to practice.

To conclude
, the type of examinations should
be depended
on the nature of the educational programs’ curriculum.
However
, I
still
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think
that the
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is the most common and effective method for all educational organizations.
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IELTS essay You have seen an advertisement for a part-time job at a restaurant and want to apply for it. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: describe your experience. tell him why you are interested in the job. say why you think you would be suitable for the v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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