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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors v.285

to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors v. 285
Some say that studying the past has no benefits for those in present era. I totally disagree with this statement because somehow history helps us learn from our past and enables us to build our future based on existing inventions. To begin with, without out past, human evolution would never have happened. Undoubtedly, we are constantly innovating ourselves based on what we have learnt before. Furthermore, an individual is only able to perfect themselves once they learnt from their mistakes, eventually it enables them to make more informed decisions by reflecting on historical outcomes involving similar decisions and situations. For example, the Twin Tower in USA, has been reconstructed using specially designed materials and glasses that have the capacity to repel an aircraft from a distance of 2 kilometres. Another important aspect is that all our discoveries are always based on our past knowledge. Take for example our transport system; the light railways are made through our old fashioned charcoal fuelled trains where coal was burnt to release energy. Later, engineers have been able to apply the same basic principles to design more advanced trains, including the Metro, light railways and cables. If it weren't for the invention of those trains, these new systems would never have taken place. In conclusion, I believe that learning from the past is essential in our lives, as it prevents us from making past mistakes as well as helping us to make technological advancements based on those past inventions. Therefore, I also believe that history lessons should form part of our educational system.
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has no benefits for those in present era. I
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disagree with this statement
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because
somehow history
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helps
us learn from our
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and enables us to build our future based on existing inventions.

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begin
with,
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without out
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, human evolution would never have happened.
Undoubtedly
, we are
constantly
innovating ourselves based on what we have
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learnt
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before
.
Furthermore
, an individual is
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only
able to perfect themselves once they
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learnt
from their mistakes,
eventually
it enables them to
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make
more informed decisions by reflecting on historical outcomes involving similar decisions and situations.
For example
, the Twin Tower
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in USA
, has
been reconstructed
using
specially
designed materials and glasses that have the capacity to repel an aircraft from a distance of 2
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kilometres
.

Another
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important
aspect is that all our discoveries are always based on our
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past
knowledge. Take
for example
our transport system; the light railways
are made
through our
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old fashioned
charcoal fuelled trains where coal
was burnt
to release energy. Later, engineers have been able to apply the same basic principles to design more advanced trains, including the Metro, light railways and cables. If it weren't for the invention of those trains, these new systems would never have taken place.

In conclusion
, I believe that learning from the
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past
is essential in our
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lives
, as it
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prevents
us from making
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past
mistakes
as well
as helping us to
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make
technological advancements based on those
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inventions.
Therefore
, I
also
believe that history lessons should form part of our educational system.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors v. 285

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4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
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