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You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: • Give details of your stay• What were the high & low points of the hotel• What are your suggestions; recommend v.1

You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: • Give details of your stay• What were the high & low points of the hotel• What are your suggestions; recommend v. 1
Fundamental education is one of the primary pillars for any pupil to attain success in their lives. It is a highly discussed topic about whether a child’s education should undergo at home or school. While some prefer homeschool as it is cost-effective, others support the traditional way of education since that is more disciplined. In this essay, I will review both sides of the views before my own perspective that the conventional mode of education is way superior. The cogent reason why other people choose to homeschool is that it is economic. Since both partners could teach their children about the elementary education for a certain year at home, they would not need any school fees. For example, in Japan, a couple saved almost 10 thousand dollars by teaching their kids at home before placing them in junior high school. Thus, teaching pupils at home could be an incredible way in order to save money. On the other hand, the greatest reason why some people, including me, prefer a traditional way of education is that it is well-structured. When it comes to educational bodies, they usually follow a systematic methodology which includes theory lectures, and sometimes practicals as well for training. To illustrate, an average student at a regular school needs to go through about 6-8 lectures and homework. Therefore, if a structured education is needed, then the regular schooling is the superior way to achieve the same. To conclude, pupils are more likely to become successful if they are taught well in their academics. This essay explained why some people are inclined towards homeschooling due to its cost, others opt for a day schooling as it is more structured. In my opinion, due to its structured way of teaching, traditional schools are significantly superior compared to teaching at home.
Fundamental
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education
is one of the primary pillars for any pupil to attain success in their
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lives
. It is a
highly
discussed topic about whether a child’s
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education
should undergo at home or
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school
. While
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some
prefer homeschool as it
is cost
-effective, others support the traditional way of
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education
since
that is
more disciplined. In this essay, I will review both sides of the views
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before
my
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own
perspective that the conventional mode of
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education
is way superior.

The cogent reason why
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other
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people
choose to homeschool is that it is economic. Since both partners could teach their children about the elementary
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education
for a certain year at home, they would not need any
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school
fees.
For example
, in Japan, a couple saved almost 10 thousand dollars by
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teaching
their kids at home
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before
placing them in junior high
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school
.
Thus
,
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teaching
pupils at home could be an incredible way in order to save money.

On the
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other
hand, the greatest reason why
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some
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people
, including me, prefer a traditional way of
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education
is that it is well-structured. When it
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comes
to educational bodies, they
usually
follow a systematic methodology which includes theory lectures, and
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sometimes
practicals
as well
for training. To illustrate, an average student at a regular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
needs to go through about 6-8 lectures and homework.
Therefore
, if a structured
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
is needed
, then the regular schooling is the superior way to achieve the same.

To conclude
, pupils are more likely to become successful if they
are taught
well in their academics. This essay
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explained
why
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are inclined
towards homeschooling due to its cost, others opt for a day schooling as it is more structured. In my opinion, due to its structured way of
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teaching
, traditional
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schools
are
significantly
superior compared to
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teaching
at home.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: • Give details of your stay• What were the high & low points of the hotel• What are your suggestions; recommend v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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