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You have listened to a radio discussion programme about facilities which should reseive money from local authorities. Writw an essay discussing two of the facilities.

You have listened to a radio discussion programme about facilities which should reseive money from local authorities. Writw an essay discussing two of the facilities. e8Xkp
Nowadays people are busy with different kind of jobs according to their life needs. After a long working day they want some kind of entertainment. So our country need some facilities like these museums, sport centres and public gardens. In this essay I am going to examine this question and then give my opinion on the matter. It is true that, local authorities are prevalently held by money in many organizations. According to that position they should organize tours around the cities because people need to know a lot of information about buildings. For instance, students, workers are tired after hard day of studying or working. They could be aware of relaxing but our museums are not popular with everybody. On the one hand, if the country needs that people should be healthier they must build and open different kind of spirt sections ss football, golf, wrestling, tennis, and mental games. Addetionly, the lifestyle of the nation will increase. On the other hand, I agree that the authorities may be aware of solving this kind of major problems. If they can't solve key issues the government to allow businessmen to build in the towns green spaces, parks. Nation walking in open air enjoy seeing such spectacular places and willthank for who did those facilities. To illustrate this, if the mood of the individuals are fine, they will acheive success in their jobs, studies as well as in their life. After analyzing these points of view, it is believed that the government should pay attention of the developing of the country not only receiving money on facilities but also lifestyle too.
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our country
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need
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some
facilities like these museums, sport
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and public gardens. In this essay I am going to examine this question and then give my opinion on the matter. It is true that, local authorities are
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prevalently
held by money in
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organizations. According to that position they should organize tours around the cities
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people
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need
to know
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a lot of
information about buildings.
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, students, workers
are tired
after
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hard
day of studying or working. They could be aware of relaxing
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our museums are not popular with everybody.

On the one hand, if the country
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should be healthier they
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build and open
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of
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football, golf, wrestling, tennis, and mental games.
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Addetionly
, the lifestyle of the nation will increase.

On the other hand
, I
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that the authorities may be aware of solving this
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kind
of major problems. If they can't solve key issues the
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government
to
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allow
businessmen to build in the towns green spaces, parks. Nation walking in open air enjoy seeing such spectacular places and
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willthank
for who did those facilities. To illustrate this, if the mood of the individuals are fine, they will
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acheive
success in their jobs, studies
as well
as in their life. After analyzing these points of view, it
is believed
that the
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government
should pay attention of the developing of the country not
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receiving money on facilities
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also
lifestyle too.
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IELTS essay You have listened to a radio discussion programme about facilities which should reseive money from local authorities. Writw an essay discussing two of the facilities.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
270 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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