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You have applied for a job at two different companies. Both have decided to choose you. Write a letter to decline one of the job offers. In your letter, apologize for not being able to accept that position and also your circumstances for turning them down v.1

You have applied for a job at two different companies. Both have decided to choose you. Write a letter to decline one of the job offers. In your letter, apologize for not being able to accept that position and also your circumstances for turning them down v. 1
In the technology world nowadays, more and more people are concerned about the knowledge of many languages. Thus, some people have the opinion that children should be stimulated to understand different languages. However, there are some people argue that children shouldn’t approach non-native languages. In this text, I will show all of my thinking about these issues. On the one hand, learning foreign languages can cause bad consequences to adolescents. Some groups of researchers have proclaimed that speaking the native languages tends to give the users expertise of those ones. Moreover, the key to success lies in quality, not quantity; rather than scrambling to learn five languages superficially, it seems more reasonable to excel in only one or two Shakespeares himself was said to know little Greek or Latin, both being prerequisite for scholarly and literary writings at the time, yet he utilized his mother tongue and imagination to create the most enduring works of literature which, even to this day, continue to endear English to many people. Last but not least, children need to concentrate on learning their mother tongue rather than learning a foreign language. Learning a new language at an early age may be confusing and wastes time. This learning may delay development of the child’s first vocabulary. From my perspectives, I totally agree with the idea that learning various languages will make youngsters more successful in the future. Languages become the primary mediator for delivering or sharing information. The stock of English has always been high, with billions of learners all over the world. English is well known as an international standard jargon and it is very important for those who live in this globalization era. Furthermore, having knowledge of many languages can help children grant access to multicultural information, advanced technology, better employment prospects, etc. In conclusion, I restate my opinion that it is extremely necessary to know one or more foreign languages. On the other hand, I highly recommend that foreign language teaching programmes be developed and applied in education, especially at high schools and at an early age.
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about the knowledge of
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languages
.
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,
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people
have the opinion that
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children
should
be stimulated
to understand
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different
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languages
.
However
, there are
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some
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people
argue that
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children
shouldn’t approach non-native
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languages
. In this text, I will
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show
all of my thinking about these issues.

On the one hand,
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learning
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foreign
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languages
can cause
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bad
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consequences to
adolescents.
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Some
groups of researchers have proclaimed that speaking the native
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languages
tends to give the users expertise of
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those ones
.
Moreover
, the key to success lies in quality, not quantity;
rather
than scrambling to learn five
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languages
superficially
, it seems more reasonable to excel in
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only
one or two
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Shakespeares
himself
was said
to know
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little
Greek or Latin, both being prerequisite for
scholarly
and literary writings at the time,
yet
he utilized his mother tongue and imagination to create the most enduring works of literature which, even to this day, continue to endear English to
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many
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people
. Last
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but
not least,
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children
need to concentrate on
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learning
their mother tongue
rather
than
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learning
a
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foreign
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language
.
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Learning
a new
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language
at an early age may be confusing and wastes time. This
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learning
may delay development of the child’s
first
vocabulary.

From my perspectives, I
totally
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agree
with the
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idea
that
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learning
various
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languages
will
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make
youngsters more successful in the future.
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Languages
become the primary mediator for delivering or sharing information. The stock of English has always been high, with billions of learners all over the world. English is well known as an international standard jargon and it is
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very
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important
for those who
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live
in this globalization era.
Furthermore
, having knowledge of
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many
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languages
can
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help
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children
grant access to multicultural information, advanced technology, better employment prospects, etc.

In conclusion
, I restate my opinion that it is
extremely
necessary to know one or more
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foreign
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languages
.
On the other hand
, I
highly
recommend that
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foreign
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language
teaching
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programmes
be developed
and applied in education,
especially
at high schools and at an early age.
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IELTS essay You have applied for a job at two different companies. Both have decided to choose you. Write a letter to decline one of the job offers. In your letter, apologize for not being able to accept that position and also your circumstances for turning them down v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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