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You had just missed a friend’s party, white a letter apologizing and stating reasons why you could not attend the party. ask how fun was it v.1

You had just missed a friend’s party, white a letter apologizing and stating reasons why you could not attend the party. ask how fun was it v. 1
Undoubtedly, there are different ways of showing our love to the people around us. Although some people think that giving gifts and presents is a better way to show our affection for our near and dear ones, others opine that there are other effective methods to show that we care and I agree with this. In this essay I shall discuss the different views of the people and also give my opinion in the forthcoming paragraphs. Some people think that it is imperative to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show the affection. This is because these things are tangible which persistently reminds them that there is someone who cares for them. To illustrate, people living overseas usually give ornaments and other expensive items to family members to show their love. The argument is that since they are miles apart nothing can prove their love as well as these gifts. Conversely, there are various ways other than gifting to show love. For example, in some Indian families the daughter-in-law shows her caring nature by serving her in-laws and looking after them. Likewise, the son-in-law may provide for his wife’s parents. As a result, the family bonding increases and a healthy relationship are built. Such kind and selfless deeds create joy in the family. In my opinion, expensive items are not always necessary to reveal the affection. The other methods such as, spending precious time with dear ones and taking care of them physically and emotionally play a significant role in showing love. In conclusion, though gifts sometimes serve as a means to show our caring nature, especially in long distance relationships these things are short lived; instead sharing quality time with friends and family and assisting them whenever they need help can be a better way to show that we care.
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love
to the
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people
around us. Although
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people
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think
that giving gifts and presents is a better
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show
our affection for our near and dear ones, others opine that there are
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other
effective methods to
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show
that we
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care
and I
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agree
with this. In this essay I shall discuss the
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different
views of the
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people
and
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give my opinion in the forthcoming paragraphs.

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Some
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people
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think
that it is imperative to give gifts and presents to friends and
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family
to
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show
the affection. This is
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because
these things are tangible which
persistently
reminds them that there is someone who
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cares
for them. To illustrate,
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people
living overseas
usually
give ornaments and
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other
expensive items to
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family
members to
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show
their
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love
. The argument is that since they are miles apart nothing can prove their
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love
as well
as these gifts.

Conversely
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ways
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other
than gifting to
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show
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love
.
For example
, in
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some
Indian
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families
the daughter-in-law
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shows
her caring nature by serving her in-laws and looking after them.
Likewise
, the son-in-law may provide for his wife’s parents.
As a result
, the
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family
bonding increases and a healthy relationship
are built
. Such kind and selfless deeds create joy in the family.

In my opinion, expensive items are not always necessary to reveal the affection. The
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other
methods such as, spending precious time with dear ones and taking
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care
of them
physically
and
emotionally
play a significant role in showing
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love
.

In conclusion
, though gifts
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sometimes
serve as a means to
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show
our caring nature,
especially
in long distance relationships these things are short
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lived
;
instead
sharing quality time with friends and
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family
and assisting them whenever they need
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help
can be a better
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way
to
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show
that we
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care
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay You had just missed a friend’s party, white a letter apologizing and stating reasons why you could not attend the party. ask how fun was it v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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