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The local council has decided on a block of flats on the park opposite to the place where you live in. Write a letter to the editor of the local newspaper protesting against this move. Make suggestion for what people can or should do to stop this developm v.1

The local council has decided on a block of flats on the park opposite to the place where you live in. Write a letter to the editor of the local newspaper protesting against this move. Make suggestion for what people can or should do to stop this developm v. 1
Each place in the world blessed with nature by one way or another. Even though urbanization brought a myriad of good things, it absorbed a major portion fertilisable field. Nowadays, it is quite difficult to satisfy the dwellers with the indigenous food items. However, a faction of people argued that local purchase will help the farmers. I partially agreed with the local purchase of food items. It is a fact that, economical development of a place is mainly depends on the circulation of money. For instance, if a sales transaction in a particular place will rotate the money there only. In addition to that, goods from far places will be more costly than the locally available goods because it included with transportation cost, carrying cost and other costs. Besides, it curtails the pollution by avoiding the vehicles. Moreover, the populace will get a chance to buy fresh food items if they are purchasing it from indigenous market. Nevertheless, most of the time local production may not be enough to satisfy the needs of local people. Taken over of agriculture fields is one of the main causes of this problem. Furthermore, people get a chance to experience alien food items as well as it will remove the barrier between places. Also, the economy will benefit through the export and import of goods. Above all, these kind of buying curb the scarcity of some places in a large extend. Having analysed both views of the topic, it is stated that though indigenous producers of food items benefited from local selling, most of the time people have to depend other places to satisfy their needs. Full dependence on local markets is unpractical in a plethora of places so, it is justifiable to depend on other places.
Each
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place
in the world blessed with nature by one way or another.
Even though
urbanization brought a myriad of
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good
things, it absorbed a major portion
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fertilisable
field. Nowadays, it is quite difficult to satisfy the dwellers with the indigenous
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food
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items
.
However
, a faction of
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people
argued that
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local
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purchase
will
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help
the farmers. I
partially
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agreed
with the
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local
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
of
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food
items.

It is a fact that,
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economical
development of a
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place
is
mainly
depends on the circulation of money.
For instance
, if a sales transaction in a particular
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place
will rotate the money there
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only
.
In addition
to that,
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goods
from far
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places
will be more costly than the
locally
available
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goods
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because
it included with transportation cost, carrying cost and other costs.
Besides
, it curtails the pollution by avoiding the vehicles.
Moreover
, the populace will
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get
a chance to
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buy
fresh
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food
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items
if they are purchasing it from indigenous market.

Nevertheless
, most of the time
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local
production may not be
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enough
to satisfy the needs of
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local
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people
. Taken over of agriculture fields is one of the main causes of this problem.
Furthermore
,
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a chance to experience alien
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food
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items
as well
as it will remove the barrier between
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places
.
Also
, the economy will benefit through the export and import of
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goods
.
Above all
,
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these kind
of buying curb the scarcity of
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some
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places
in a large extend.

Having
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analysed
both views of the topic, it
is stated
that though indigenous producers of
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food
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items
benefited from
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local
selling, most of the time
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people
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have to
The verb 'to depend' requires the preposition '(up)on': "depend on".
depend
other
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places
to satisfy their needs. Full dependence on
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local
markets is unpractical in a plethora of
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places
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, it is justifiable to depend on other
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places
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The local council has decided on a block of flats on the park opposite to the place where you live in. Write a letter to the editor of the local newspaper protesting against this move. Make suggestion for what people can or should do to stop this developm v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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