Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You are going to set up your new business. What do you care about? Why?

You are going to set up your new business. What do you care about? Why? 6dM9B
It is difficult and risky to start a new business, so I need to specify steps in my plan. For that purpose, i have to clearly define: what to produce or sell? who to sell? Where to sell? And how to sell? The first, identify the most promising segments beacause segmentation allows businesses to better use their budgets, gaining a competitive edge over the competition. Identifying target customers makes marketing easier. For example, if your business sell luxury products, your target customers will be group of rich people. Third, after knowing your target customers, you will choose the right locations for the new stores, where they are crowded. Finally, you must know how to compete with other businesses to sell products. In addition, you need to add other special elements. Nowadays, there are a lot of startup, so you have to make a difference to succeed
It is difficult and risky to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I need to specify steps in my plan. For that purpose,
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
clearly
define: what to produce or
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sell
?
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
who
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sell
? Where to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sell
? And how to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sell
? The
first
, identify the most promising segments
Possible spelling mistake found.
beacause
segmentation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
to better
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their budgets, gaining a competitive edge over the competition. Identifying target customers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
marketing easier.
For example
, if your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
business
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sell
luxury products, your target customers will be group of rich
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. Third, after knowing your target customers, you will choose the right locations for the new stores, where they
are crowded
.
Finally
, you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
know how to compete with other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sell
products.
In addition
, you need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
other special elements. Nowadays, there are
Possible agreement error. The noun startup seems to be countable; consider using: "a lot of startups".
a lot of startup
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a difference to succeed
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay You are going to set up your new business. What do you care about? Why?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
145 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • You are going to set up your new business. What do you care about? Why?