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XII. Write a short story begin: “ One day I stayed at home alone.” about 120 words

XII. Write a short story begin: “ One day I stayed at home alone. ” about 120 words JK3r5
One day I stayed at home alone. It was hot day and I was in my room wathched TV. Suddenly, I heard noises outside, I felt nevours because the house was too quite for me to scare. Next, I heard who tried to unlock and the footstep sound. At this time, I sweated a lot. But just a moment I decided to opened the door and I saw a rob then I took my phone and called my parents came back home. When my parents came back, I called to the police and said "My house had a rob and he tried to find our money. Luckily, my parents and the police came to our home very quickly and the police catched the rob. And our house didn't property loss. THE END
One day I stayed at home alone. It was hot
day and
I was in my room
wathched
TV.
Suddenly
, I heard noises outside, I felt
nevours
because
the
house
was
too quite
for me to scare.

Next
, I heard who tried to unlock and the footstep sound. At this time, I sweated a lot.
But
just
a moment I decided
to opened
the door and I
saw
a rob
then I took my phone and called my parents came back home. When my parents came back, I called to the police and said
"
My
house
had a
rob and
he tried to find our money.

Luckily, my parents and the police came to our home
very
quickly
and the police
catched
the rob
. And our
house
didn't property loss.

THE
END
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IELTS essay XII. Write a short story begin: “ One day I stayed at home alone. ” about 120 words

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
131 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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