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Writing task 2 , extreme activities that are risky.

Writing task 2, extreme activities that are risky. ebR0x
There is an evidently rising trend of crowd, partaking in challenging and dreadful activities like hand-gliding and mountain climbing. I think, this is a good trend until and unless people do not overdo it and also when done by taking all the safety precautions. In this essay I will enlist few reasons why they take part in these activities and will also support my view with examples. Firstly, to begin with the reasons for the growing popularity of these risk taking activities is the thrill and danger associated with it as now-a-days life has become boring for a plethoraof people who do 9 to 5 jobs. It is indeed surprising how a life threatening activity can actually be that entertaining. Study suggests that whenever, a person is stressed, these kinds of exercises can release bouts of adrenaline and this rush can relieve him from his stress and can help in boosting up their performance in work. For instance, few years ago when I gave my final exams, I was consequently stressed about clearing the exam I landed up feeling anxious, that is when I decided to go for bungee jumping and it pumped down my anxiety levels. Therefore, as I stated earlier I do think it's a good trend to undergo such tasks as long as we do it to only an extent. However, overdoing it can be extremely dreadful due to the fact that it can cost them their lives and will leave their family members in grief. It is also immensely much necessary to follow the prerequisites which are preset for any activity. In conclusion, these extreme activities fuel up people with thrill and is a great stress management exercise. I do believe, it is a good trend that people are challenging their fear levels and trying to have fun, as long as necessary measures for safety have been taken.
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evidently
rising
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of crowd, partaking in challenging and dreadful
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activities
like hand-gliding and mountain climbing. I
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think
, this is a
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good
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trend
until and unless
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people
do not overdo it and
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take part
in these
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activities
and will
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support my view with examples.

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with the reasons for the growing popularity of these
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risk
taking
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is the thrill and
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danger
associated with it as
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now
-a-days life has become boring for a
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people
who do 9 to 5 jobs. It is
indeed
surprising how a life threatening
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activity
can actually be that entertaining. Study suggests that whenever, a person is
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stressed
, these kinds of exercises can release bouts of adrenaline and this rush can relieve him from his
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stress
and can
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help
in boosting up their performance in work.
For instance
, few years ago when I gave my final exams, I was
consequently
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stressed
about clearing the exam I landed up feeling anxious,
that is
when I decided to go for bungee jumping and it pumped down my anxiety levels.

Therefore
, as I stated earlier I do
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think
it's a
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good
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trend
to undergo such tasks as long as we do it to
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only
an extent.
However
, overdoing it can be
extremely
dreadful due to the fact that it can cost them their
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lives
and will
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leave
their family members in grief. It is
also
immensely
much necessary to follow the prerequisites which are preset for any activity.

In conclusion
, these extreme
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activities
fuel up
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people
with thrill and is a great
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stress
management exercise. I do believe, it is a
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good
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trend
that
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people
are challenging their fear levels and trying to have fun, as long as necessary measures for safety have
been taken
.
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IELTS essay Writing task 2, extreme activities that are risky.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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