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Writing about Changing mind

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I chose this title because I was thought about something that is common among people. It's emotions( sad, depressed, angry, confused ect. . . . ). People don't like such feelings. I think it would be a little better if we change our minds during those times. Everyone like to be happy, but no one like to be upset. So when we are upset or in problems, we should change our minds rather than sink into that situation. Because happiness will not always be the same and sadness will not always be. Our problems or grief will go away with time. Even if we are sad because we have problems, don't hold on to that sadness. Let go of your sadness and try to change your mind like 'It's wil be over a while, I don't have to worry so much'. That way we can get rid of our sadness. The main thing I want to say is change of minds. Eg(. . . . . . . . . . . . . ) Changing minds are not easy. But It is a good thing not a bad thing. If we change it for the first time, it will be easier to change our minds later. That means we don't have to change everything, just change what we need and it will be better for us. Eg(. . . . . . . . . . )We benefit greatly from changing our minds. We can have better social relationships, friends and much more.
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about something
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. It's emotions
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sad, depressed, angry, confused
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ect
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.
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People
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like such feelings. I
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think
it would be a
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little
better if we
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change
our
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minds
during those times. Everyone like to be happy,
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no one like to
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when we
are upset
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minds
rather
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Because
happiness will not always be the same and
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sadness
will not always be. Our problems or grief will go away with time. Even if we are sad
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because
we have problems,
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don't
hold on to that
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sadness
.
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and try to
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your
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mind
like 'It's
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Changing
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are not easy.
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thing not a
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thing. If we
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change
it for the
first
time, it will be easier to
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our
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minds
later. That means we
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change
everything,
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just
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change
what we need and it will be better for us.
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We benefit
greatly
from changing our
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minds
. We can have better social relationships, friends and much more.
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IELTS essay Writing about Changing mind

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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