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From: Declan Subject: college trip Hello, I'm not really interested into this camping trip as I hate camping. We can just sleep live in a normal life in a house or hotel. I would like to borrow you my sleeping bag but make sure you must give it back to me when you don't have to use it. I'm bringing some cup noodles to the trip as for snack. Probably some bun and biscuits. I am getting to college at 9 am as I always wake up at 8 am. I don't mind choosing any seats for the coach, they are totally fine for me. I am not very fussy about seats and I just chill with it. See you there soon!
From: Declan

Subject: college trip

Hello,

I'm not
really
interested into this camping trip as I hate camping. We can
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just
sleep
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live
in a normal life in a
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house
or hotel. I would like to borrow you my sleeping bag
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but
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make
sure you
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must
give it back to me when you don't
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have to
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use
it. I'm bringing
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some
cup noodles to the trip as for snack.
Probably
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some
bun and biscuits. I am getting to college at 9 am as I always wake up at 8 am. I don't mind choosing any seats for the coach, they are
totally
fine for me.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am not
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very
fussy about seats and I
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just
chill with it.
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See
you there
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soon
!

IELTS essay Write your email to Paula using all the notes.

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  American English
2 paragraphs
122 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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