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Write Story about John as teenager

Write Story about John as teenager p11Vd

Once upon time, John would have decided to have an adventure toward unknown lands in the pacific oceans and during his journey, he have faced with too many horrendous which would have destroyed all his life. It's all began when John reaches the teen ages and he would have started making trouble and struggle with his parent whom couldn’t have understood his situation, so as to he couldn’t have found no solution except running away from home. In one of those arguable nights eventually John which have been wholly exhausted from sorrowful life unexpectedly end up with a dory on the river down his house and suddenly he has remembered a dream which always he was brainstorming it all his childhood "Having fared with boat toward lands which nobody would have not been able to seek him". Nevertheless, this young truth seeker cannot picture what will have been happened to him he would have got on the dory and quickly dory has started moving in spite of John must have attempted to stop the dory, it was too late though. After days in and days out, John's dory was moving along river which carry on unconscious John all this time, a few moments later suddenly the dory starts shaking and it made John awake. When John have opened his eyes, he found himself in middle of the entirely blue and shining waters which he can guess it is the ocean. He has nervously begun propel toward the nearest lands, although he knows there is no land in the middle of oceans, he would not have lost his hope.

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lands
 in the pacific oceans and during his journey, he The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "has", "had".hashad
have
 faced with too This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 horrendous which would have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demolishedruined
destroyed
 all his life.

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ages and
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started
 making trouble and struggle with his parent whom couldn’t have understood his situation, 'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"to
so as to
 he couldn’t have found no solution except running away from home. In one of those arguable nights eventually
 John which have been wholly exhausted from sorrowful life unexpectedly
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end
 up with a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyachtskiffcraftvesselshipcatamaran
dory
 on the river down his This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 and suddenly
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lands
 which nobody would have not been able to seek himUse a smart closing quote here: "”".”
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. Nevertheless
, this young truth seeker cannot picture what will have been happened
 to him he would have This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 on the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyachtskiffcraftvesselshipcatamaran
dory
 and quickly
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dory
 has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 moving This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:notwithstanding
in spite of
 John This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
 have attempted to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyachtskiffcraftvesselshipcatamaran
dory
, it was too late though. After days in and days out, John's You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyachtskiffcraftvesselshipcatamaran
dory
 was moving along river which carry on unconscious John all this time, a few moments later suddenly
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withyachtskiffcraftvesselshipcatamaran
dory
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiates
starts
 shaking and it made John awake. When John have opened his eyes, he found himself in middle of the entirely
 blue and shining waters which he can guess it is the ocean. He has nervously
 begun propel toward the nearest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withestatesoilterrainhomeearthcontinent
lands
, although he knows there is no You use this word too often, consider replacing it withestatesoilterrainhomeearthcontinent
land
 in the middle of oceans, he would not have lost his hope. 