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Writing task 2 - Learning history

Writing task 2 - Learning history W880D
There are different opinions about the role of history in our present life. While many people think that studying history can teach young people about historical facts and information, the others feel that its main function is to acquaint them with the skills necessary in later life. In this essay, I will give evidence for both functions and give the final opinion. The first function introduced is the history can provide students with a lot of knowledge and important content. Historical facts and information can let them know more about the merits of the kings, generals, leaders in the past to protect the country. Those historical stories can also serve to inspire individuals to greatness. You get a huge amount of motivation from learning about those events and those people that have made it possible for us to live a peaceful life as we are today. Last, we can develop an understanding of the world. Through history, we can learn how past societies, systems, technologies and culture were built in different countries, too. With the second function, learning history may acquaint them with many necessary skills in the near future. Firstly, history trains us in research and discovery skills. Inherently this is a subject that requires the curiosity of each person about the past, they must learn and explore more about history to understand its value. Secondly, they become a more rounded person. In history, there are full of stories. Some are inspring and motivated, the others are chaotic and savage. But, from the stories of the past, we learned how to changed to become better and do not repeat the same mistakes in the past to develop the country. Like the idiom " The failure is the mother of success", people always learn new things from their own experiences, that is one of the important elements of studying history. In conclusion, I think both are major functions of history. However, no matter what the main function of this course is, I just hope people can understand the true value of this subject and love it more like other subjects.
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in our present life. While
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that studying
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can teach young
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about historical facts and information, the others feel that its main
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function
is to acquaint them with the
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skills
necessary in later life. In this essay, I will give evidence for both
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functions
and give the final opinion.

The
first
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function
introduced is the
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history
can provide students with
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a lot of
knowledge and
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important
content. Historical facts and information can
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let
them know more about the merits of the kings, generals, leaders in the
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past
to protect the country. Those historical stories can
also
serve to inspire individuals to greatness. You
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a huge amount of motivation from learning about those

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and those
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that have made it possible for us to
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live
a peaceful life as we are
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today
. Last, we can develop an understanding of the world. Through
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history
, we can learn how
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societies, systems, technologies and culture
were built
in
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different
countries, too.

With the second
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, learning
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may acquaint them with
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necessary
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in the near future.
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,
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trains us in research and discovery
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.
Inherently
this is a subject that requires the curiosity of each person about the
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past
, they
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learn and explore more about
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history
to understand its value.
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, they become a more rounded person. In
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, there are full of stories.
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and motivated, the others are chaotic and savage.
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, from the stories of the
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, we learned how to
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changed
to become better and do not repeat the same mistakes in the
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to develop the country. Like the idiom
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,
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always learn new things from their
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experiences,
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elements of studying history.

In conclusion
, I
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both are major
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of
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.
However
, no matter what the main
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of this course is, I
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hope
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can understand the true value of this subject and
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it more like other subjects.
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IELTS essay Writing task 2 - Learning history

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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