Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

write an narrative paragraph about a challenge/ experience that you have faced

write an narrative paragraph about a challenge/ experience that you have faced Kw30L

Last year, I had an unforgettable experience. It was in a sunny morning, and I went to the beach with my friend. We started going to the beach in the early morning, 5AM. When we arrived, the sunrise was so amazing and the weather was good. After took some beautiful photos, I and my friend went swimming. At first I did not dare to swim far because it was a deep one. While I was swimming and was enjoying the warm water, my foot was suddenly hurt. At that time, my mind was so scared, I tried to scream under the water but I could not. Everything was getting bad, I could not breath, I felt I was going to die. Right away, my friend ran to me and save me, she woke me up. She was totally shocked. Fortunately, I was safe. After that accident, I am being scared of the water. I try to be more careful when go to the beach and not to swim alone. It was an unforgettable memory in my life.

Last year, I had an unforgettable experience. It was in a sunny morning, and I went to the beach with my friend. We This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 going to the beach in the early morning, 5AM. When we arrived, the sunrise was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 amazing and the weather was This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
. After took This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :gorgeousstunning
beautiful
 photos, I and my friend went swimming. At The comma is probably missing here: "first, I".first, I
first I
 did not dare to swim far This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it was a deep one. While I was swimming and was enjoying the warm water, my foot was suddenly
 hurt. At that time, my mind was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 scared, I tried to scream under the water This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 I could not. Everything was getting This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
, I Did you mean "can not breathe"?can not breathe
could not breath
, I felt I was going to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :pass away
die
. Right away, my friend ran to me and save me, she woke me up. She was totally
 shocked. Fortunately
, I was safe. After that accident, I am being scared
 of the water. I try to be more careful when go to the beach and not to swim alone. It was an unforgettable memory in my life. 