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Write an essay to discuss the idea that parents should be friends with children.

Write an essay to discuss the idea that parents should be friends with children. 0aKJG
In recent years, teaching children has become an abroad issue to the general public. Some people believe that parents should become a friend with their children. I totally agree with this statement. Discussed below are several reasons in favor of my perspectives. First and foremost, people should recognize that very important point to consider is that when people make a friend with their children, they can easily share with children almost problem. When children are closes to their family, instead of telling their friends their troubles, they will ask their parents for help. They think that parents have more living experience and they certainly give them a good idea. For example, in one family, children are often afraid of if they make mistake, however, when parents become friendly, they can talk about their mistake and help their parent see it, after that, their parent can help them fix it. Another point I would like to make is that thanks to parents becoming a friend, children can receive a large of numerous knowledge. Because their parents have many experiences, the kids can get the right advice from their parents. Besides, their parents will also understand what they want and promptly orient them on issues such as work, love, etc. Besides, becoming a friend with children can help them improve their personalities. It means that children have become social people if their parents are always hospitable. Moreover, if their parents would like to become a friend with their children has a thing children's pride in their friends In conclusion, the above-mentioned facts have created a dilemma when people evaluate the impact of this issue and it is still a controversial issue. I completely believe that, people should be a friend with their children. As far as I am concerned, it could have both positive and negative impacts. People should have further consideration on this issue.
In recent years, teaching
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children
has
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become
an abroad
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issue
to the
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general public
.
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Some
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people
believe that
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parents
should
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become
a
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friend
with their
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children
. I
totally
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agree
with this statement. Discussed below are several reasons in favor of my perspectives.

First
and foremost,
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people
should recognize that
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very
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important
point to consider is that when
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people
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make
a
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friend
with their
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children
, they can
easily
share with
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children
almost problem. When
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children
are closes to their family,
instead
of telling their
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friends
their troubles, they will ask their
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parents
for
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help
. They
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think
that
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parents
have more living
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experience and
they
certainly
give them a
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good
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idea
.
For example
, in one family,
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children
are
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often
afraid of if they
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make
mistake,
however
, when
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parents
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become
friendly, they can talk about their mistake and
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help
their
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parent
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see
it, after that, their
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parent
can
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help
them
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fix
it.

Another point I would like to
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make
is that thanks to
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parents
becoming a
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friend
,
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children
can receive a large of numerous knowledge.
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Because
their
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parents
have
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many
experiences, the kids can
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get
the right advice from their
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parents
.
Besides
, their
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parents
will
also
understand what they want and
promptly
orient them on
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issues
such as work,
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love
, etc.

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Besides
, becoming a
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friend
with
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children
can
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help
them
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improve
their personalities. It means that
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children
have
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become
social
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people
if their
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parents
are always hospitable.
Moreover
, if their
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parents
would like to
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become
a
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friend
with their
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children
has a thing children's pride in their friends

In conclusion
, the above-mentioned facts have created a dilemma when
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people
evaluate the impact of this
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issue
and it is
still
a controversial
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issue
. I completely believe that,
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people
should be a
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friend
with their
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children
. As far as I
am concerned
, it could have both
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positive
and
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negative
impacts.
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People
should have
further
consideration on this
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issue
.
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IELTS essay Write an essay to discuss the idea that parents should be friends with children.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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