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Write an essay on the following topic: (250 words) (20 points) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: ''Electronic devices are destroying the quality of human interaction.”

Write an essay on the following topic: (250 words) (20 points) : ''Electronic devices are destroying the quality of human interaction. ” Q50e3
Nowadays, when the technology has been developed a lot, all people just like using the Internet to help them do everything. Some electronic components are used to replace people so much. I don’t think they are destroying the quality of human interaction. This graph I will give you some reason. We all know the benefit and the consequences of eletronic devices. But we don’t know why people are affected by the technology although it has been invented to help people. We just know the drawback and we don’t realize that electronic brings you a lot of advantage. Firstly, the Internet can easily help you to connect with your friends through the mobile phones or the computer. Not only do they help you to chat with your friends but they also help you to do housework. Some electronic machines can very useful so that we have a more convenient life. We have more time to go out with friends and interact with them. Secondly, if electronic machines help me with some eassy work, we will have time to invent another things. In the past, we just met each other in person but now we can meet online through the Internet so we can chat with friends or your partners everytime we want. Finally, a lot of machines have been invented in our life. It is also a challenge for human’friendship. We can know our friends whether they are addicted to the Internet or not. If electronic devices are widely used, they remember you, your friendship is very wonderful. Human interaction will also develop based on that. In conclusion, electronic devices can not destroy the quality of human interaction. All the machines have been invented to help people so just people can destroy their interaction
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help
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electronic
components are
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people
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so
much. I don’t
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think
they are destroying the quality of human
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interaction
. This graph I will give you
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some
reason.

We all
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know
the benefit and the consequences of
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eletronic
devices.
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we don’t
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know
why
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are
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affected
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been invented
to
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help
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people
. We
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just
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know
the
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drawback and
we don’t realize that
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electronic
brings you
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a lot of
advantage.

Firstly
, the Internet can
easily
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help
you to connect with your
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friends
through the mobile phones or the computer. Not
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only
do they
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help
you to chat with your
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friends
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but
they
also
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help
you to do housework.
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Some
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electronic
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machines
can
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very
useful
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so
that we have a more convenient life. We have more time to go out with
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friends
and interact with them.

Secondly
, if
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electronic
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machines
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help
me with
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some
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eassy
work, we will have time to invent another things. In the past, we
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just
met each other in person
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but
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now
we can
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meet
online through the Internet
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so
we can chat with
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friends
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everytime
we want.

Finally
,
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a lot of
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machines
have
been invented
in our life. It is
also
a challenge for human’friendship. We can
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know
our
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friends
whether they
are addicted
to the Internet or not. If
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electronic
devices are
widely
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used
, they remember you, your friendship is
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very
wonderful. Human
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interaction
will
also
develop based on that.

In conclusion
,
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electronic
devices can not
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destroy
the quality of human
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interaction
. All the
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machines
have
been invented
to
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help
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people
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so
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just
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people
can
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destroy
their
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interaction
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IELTS essay Write an essay on the following topic: (250 words) (20 points) : ''Electronic devices are destroying the quality of human interaction. ”

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  American English
6 paragraphs
292 words
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