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write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the areas in your notes. You should explain which area you think most influences how people shop and provide reasons to support your opinion

write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the areas in your notes. You should explain which area you think most influences how people shop and provide reasons to support your opinion L96lp
Hardly a week goes by without another news report about the recent dramatic increase in online shopping. The decline of the high street shop is undoubtedly a major issue in this day and age. However, which aspect of shopping has the biggest influence on where people shop? The first area to take into account is convenience. It is undoubtedly the case that shopping online is much more convenient than shopping on the high street. Not only can you make a purchase with the click of a button, but also you can do it from the comfort of your sofa without setting foot outside your door. In addition, the goods are delivered directly to your door whereas when you shop in physical shops you have to carry it home yourself. Another aspect to consider is cost. There are those who argue that cost has the biggest impact on where people decide to shop. This is illustrated by the fact that during the sales many people buy things in shops they would not normally enter. Nevertheless, for some people the cost is not an issue, they buy what they want to buy no matter the price. In light of the above, weighing up all the evidence, it is probably true to say that cost does indeed have the biggest influence on where people decide to shop due to the fact that most of the time, if you cannot afford something then you will not be able to buy it.
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. The decline of the high street
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shop
is
undoubtedly
a major issue in this day and age.
However
, which aspect of
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shopping
has the biggest influence on where
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people
shop?

The
first
area to take into account is convenience. It is
undoubtedly
the case that
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shopping
online is much more convenient than
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on the high street. Not
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only
can you
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make
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purchase
with the click of a button,
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but
also
you can do it from the comfort of your sofa without setting foot outside your door.
In addition
, the
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goods
are delivered
directly
to your door whereas when you
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shop
in physical
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shops
you
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have to
carry it home yourself.

Another aspect to consider is
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cost
. There are those who argue that
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cost
has the biggest impact on where
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people
decide to
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shop
. This
is illustrated
by the fact that during the sales
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many
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people
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things in
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they would not
normally
enter.
Nevertheless
, for
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people
the
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cost
is not an issue, they
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buy
what they want to
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buy
no matter the price.

In light of the above, weighing up all the evidence, it is
probably
true to say that
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cost
does
indeed
have the biggest influence on where
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people
decide to
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shop
due to the fact that most of the time, if you cannot afford something then you will not be able to
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buy
it.
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IELTS essay write an essay for your tutor discussing two of the areas in your notes. You should explain which area you think most influences how people shop and provide reasons to support your opinion

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
247 words
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