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There was this one time in my childhood day, which I will never forgot. It was my younger brother fell into a pond. I was chatting with my friend while my little brother played around the pond and saw fish. After a couple of minutes, he slipped and fell down into the pond. I felt frightened and didn’t know what I should to do. My heart almost stopped beating. Then I called out loudly for my father come. He ran so fast to ward me, jumped over the fishpond and grabbed his with his arm. Fortunately, my dad and little brother are safe. Later, I felt so lucky. After that accident, I try to be careful when doing anything. To me, nothing is more precions than life.
There was this one time in my childhood day, which I will never forgot. It was my younger brother fell into a pond. I was chatting with my friend while my
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little
brother played around the pond and
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saw
fish. After a couple of minutes, he slipped and fell down into the pond. I felt frightened and didn’t know what I should to do. My heart almost
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stopped
beating. Then I called out
loudly
for my father
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come
. He ran
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so
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fast
to ward me, jumped over the fishpond and grabbed his with his arm.
Fortunately
, my dad and
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little
brother are safe. Later, I felt
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so
lucky. After that accident, I try to be careful when doing anything. To me, nothing is more
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precions
than life.
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IELTS essay write about your story childhood

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