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Write about your personal perspectives in a paragraph.

Write about your personal perspectives in a paragraph. 3gMOX
Every human has a different personal perspectives of the future. From my point of view future will be better than now. I’m awaiting a more prosperous moment that see my children happy. If they success, I will be satisfied. I always have been an industrious woman. I have been trying so hard to make better life since I was 18 years old. Now, I'm in my forties. So, I have the opportunity to pursue my interests. As a result, I decided to continue learning English to achieve my dream of fluent English conversation. Then, I travel all over Iran and around the world, the only thing I have not done in my life completely and I owe it to myself. I hope I can speak English well.
Every human has a
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personal
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perspectives
of the future. From my point of view future will be better than
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now
.

I’m awaiting a more prosperous moment that
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see
my children happy. If
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they success
, I will
be satisfied
.

I always have been an industrious woman. I have been trying
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so
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hard
to
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make
better life since I was 18 years
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.
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Now
, I'm in my forties.
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, I have the opportunity to pursue my interests.

As a result
, I decided to continue learning English to achieve my dream of fluent English conversation.

Then, I travel all over Iran and around the world, the
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only
thing I have not done in my life completely and I owe it to myself. I hope I can speak English well.

IELTS essay Write about your personal perspectives in a paragraph.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
127 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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