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Write about your mom-who you love the most

Write about your mom-who you love the most J3o70
Everyone both has mom, so I do. My mother's name is Bong. She is thirty-six years old. At the age of 36, she still young and gogerous. She is teaching at Dong Phu Secondary school. Despite being a music and civic education teacher, she also good at literature. She often teaches me literature, civic education or how to sing beautifully. She cooks very well so she always teach me how to cook. I love that. I can say that, her apperance in my life is such a wonderful thing. I've learnt a lot of things from her. I used to be a little bit shy to communicate with new people, but thanks to my mom's encouragement now I am not afraid to make new friends or communicate with othe people. Sometimes I wondered how she could be such a perfect person like that. I love my mom very much
Everyone both has mom,
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I do. My mother's name is Bong. She is thirty-six years
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. At the age of 36,
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she
still
young and
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gogerous
. She is teaching at Dong
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Phu
Secondary school. Despite being a music and civic education teacher,
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she
also
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good
at literature. She
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often
teaches me literature, civic education or how to sing
beautifully
. She cooks
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very
well
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so
she always
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teach
me how to cook. I
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love
that. I can say that, her
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apperance
in my life is such a wonderful thing.
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I
've
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learnt
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a lot of
things from her.
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I
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used
to be a
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little bit
shy to communicate with new
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people
,
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but
thanks to my mom's encouragement
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now
I am not afraid to
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make
new friends or communicate with
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othe
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people
.
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Sometimes
I wondered how she could be such a perfect person like that. I
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love
my mom
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very
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much
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IELTS essay Write about your mom-who you love the most

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
148 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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