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Write about your experience when you bought a product at a shop

Write about your experience when you bought a product at a shop MwQj6
Last weekend, I went shopping at Hichi shop with my friends. The products here are very beautiful, good quality and reasonable prices. Moreover, the staffs are very enthusiastic and friendly. After some hesitation I decided to buy a white dress and a coat with a total value of 1 million VND. I paid and got a 5% discount for being a big bill customer. We were happy to leave, but when I got home, I was surprised to find a coat missing. Straight away, I contacted the shop via the phone number on the invoice and asked the staff to solve the problem. The staff apologized and suggested I bring the bill back to the shop to get my coat back. I came and got it back. I was very satisfied with the shop's problem solving. It was very professional. I will definitely go back and recommend the shop to my friends.
Last weekend, I went shopping at
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Hichi
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with my friends. The products here are
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beautiful
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quality and reasonable prices.
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, the staffs are
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enthusiastic and friendly. After
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hesitation I decided to
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buy
a white dress and a coat with a total value of 1 million VND. I paid and
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got
a 5% discount for being a
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bill customer. We were happy to
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leave
,
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when I
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home, I
was surprised
to find a coat missing. Straight away, I contacted the
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shop
via the phone number on the invoice and asked the staff to solve the problem. The staff apologized and suggested I bring the bill
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back
to the
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shop
to
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get
my coat
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. I came and
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it
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. I was
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satisfied with the shop's problem solving. It was
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professional. I will definitely go
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and recommend the
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to my friends.
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IELTS essay Write about your experience when you bought a product at a shop

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152 words
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