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Write about the technology device you can use

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On my 14th birthday, I received a very precious gift from my mother. That is a laptop. It is so difficult to describe a laptop in words, but I just want to tell you something. This is an i3, and it has a black color. I don't know the price of the laptop because it is a gift, but it is priceless to me. I am not an IT professional, so I cannot know much about computer, but I still want to say that it is not only stylish but also useful. This gift is very helpful to me. It helped me both in education and social aspects. Whenever I have to complete an assignment or report, or when I want to find anything, I use my computer. I also use different websites and apps to talk or communicate with my ffriends. Besides, I can use it for entertainment, such as watching movies, playing games. . . I can say that if I didn't have this beautiful gift, my life would be boring and slow. That's why I always tell my mother how much I thank her for giving me something useful, which actually helped me a lot.
On my 14th birthday, I received a
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,
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stylish
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useful. This
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helpful to me. It
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me both in education and social aspects. Whenever I
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have to
complete an assignment or report, or when I want to find anything, I
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my computer. I
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use
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websites and apps to talk or communicate with my
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, I can
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it for entertainment, such as watching movies, playing games.
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I can say that if I didn't have this
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beautiful
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gift
, my life would be boring and slow. That's why I always
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tell
my mother how much I thank her for giving me something useful, which actually
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me a lot.
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IELTS essay Write about the technology device you can use

Essay
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198 words
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