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Write about an invention that has changed your life

Write about an invention that has changed your life Oy1Wp
Computer is one of the most important invention in history. It has much influence on our life. Firstly, computer improves quality of communication. Before computer was invented, the communication is so difficult that talking with others too far away. Now, computers bring people closer together. For example, people can communicate with others in the world by using e-mail. It saves their time compared with letter. It’s very convenient for people who’d like to send letters to other country. Secondly, having computers in the work place help the business to run more efficiently. Using computer cut down their work times. They don’t have to write everything out by hand or type it out on typewriters. If they don’t work by computer, they may make a lot of mistake. Also, It’s easier to find the information that you need to find. When computers weren’t invented, people had to go to libraries and search through books and find out information. Now, you can find information in the internet. Then, computer is used in schools. Teachers use it for teaching. The lessons are more interesting so students remember the lesson easily. If the computer weren’t invented, people would work inefficiently so economics wouldn’t increase. They must spend a lot of time for communication. Therefore, computers are necessary in our life.
Computer is one of the most
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important
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invention
in history. It has much influence on our life.
Firstly
, computer
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improves
quality of communication.
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Before
computer
was invented
, the communication is
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so
difficult that talking with others too far away.
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Now
, computers bring
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people
closer together.
For example
,
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people
can communicate with others in the world by using e-mail. It saves their time compared with letter. It’s
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very
convenient for
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people
who’d like to
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send
letters to other country.
Secondly
, having computers in the
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work
place
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help
the business to run more
efficiently
. Using computer
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cut
down their
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work
times. They don’t
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have to
write everything out by hand or type it out on typewriters. If they don’t
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work
by computer, they may
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make
Possible agreement error. The noun mistake seems to be countable; consider using: "a lot of mistakes".
a lot of mistake
.
Also
, It’s easier to
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find
the information that you need to
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find
. When computers weren’t invented,
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people
had to go to libraries and search through books and
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find
out information.
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Now
, you can
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find
information
The usual collocation for technology is "on," not "in." It is better to say this: "on the internet".
in the internet
. Then, computer is
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used
in schools. Teachers
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use
it for teaching. The lessons are more interesting
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so
students remember the lesson
easily
. If the computer weren’t invented,
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people
would
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work
inefficiently
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so
economics wouldn’t increase. They
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must
spend
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a lot of
time for communication.
Therefore
, computers are necessary in our life.
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IELTS essay Write about an invention that has changed your life

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