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Write about a time when someone you trusted let you down. Describe what happened and how this experience has changed you as a person. Write between 250 – 300 words.

Write about a time when someone you trusted let you down. Describe what happened and how this experience has changed you as a person. Write between 250 – 300 words. pRKJa
When I was younger, I was slightly ingenuous. I believed in friendship and I thought that a person considered a friend would never hurt you. Obviously, I discovered soon I was wrong. I was 18 years old and I attended the last year of the high school. I was a friendly girl surrounded by friends and I had a boyfriend, a handsome boy I can define ‘my first love’. During that year at school I met new people, especially a girl who appeared truly interesting and full of life. After a while, we started to catch up every day at school or after lessons, building a new friendship. Once I invited her to my small town. I come from a village surrounded by countryside, in which every summer inhabitants organize a big party, lasting three days, with food music and funny shows. That was the perfect occasion to invite my new friend to meet my boyfriend and other people. It was an enjoyable party, drinking and dancing all the night, despite the fact that my new friend preferred to speak to my boyfriend rather than me. They carry on speaking and laughing all night and she was clearly chat up with him. Few days later I broke up with my boyfriend and I have never seen her again. This is a kind of ‘classic’ situation for teenager, almost everyone had been hurt by a friend or a boyfriend or girlfriend. Surely in that specific moment, when the wound is opened, is difficult to understand, but now I think is something you need once in the life to choose better your friends and be more selective in future. Now I’m still friendly, opened to meet new people, even though I have just few real friends I can trust.
When I was younger, I was
slightly
ingenuous. I believed in friendship and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
that a person considered a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
would never hurt you.
Obviously
, I discovered
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soon
I was
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wrong
.

I was 18 years
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old
and I attended the last year of the high school. I was a friendly girl surrounded by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
and I had a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boyfriend
, a handsome boy I can define ‘my
first
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
’. During that year at school I met
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
especially
a girl who appeared
The extreme adjective for interesting is "fascinating", or "exciting".
truly interesting
and full of life. After a while, we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to catch up every day at school or after lessons, building a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
friendship.

“Once” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Once
I invited her to my
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small
town. I
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come
from a village surrounded by countryside, in which every summer inhabitants organize a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
party, lasting three days, with food music and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
funny
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
. That was the perfect occasion to invite my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
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friend
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
my
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boyfriend
and other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
. It was an enjoyable party, drinking and dancing all the night, despite the fact that my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
preferred to speak to my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boyfriend
rather
than me. They carry on speaking and laughing all
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
night and
she was
clearly
Consider using a past participle here: "chatted".
chat
up with him. Few days later I broke up with my
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boyfriend
and I have never
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seen
her again.

This is a kind of ‘classic’ situation for
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teenager
, almost everyone had
been hurt
by a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friend
or a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
boyfriend
or girlfriend.
Surely
in that specific moment, when the wound
is opened
, is difficult to understand,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
is something you need once in the life to choose better your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
friends
and be more selective
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.
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Now
I’m
still
friendly, opened to
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meet
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new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
,
even though
I have
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just
few real
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friends
I can trust.
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IELTS essay Write about a time when someone you trusted let you down. Describe what happened and how this experience has changed you as a person. Write between 250 – 300 words.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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