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write a story for our magazines, your story must begin with this sentence: Jerry read the email and decided to go to the shopping centre immediately Your story must include: - A request - A present

write a story for our magazines, your story must begin with this sentence: Jerry read the email and decided to go to the shopping centre immediately Your story must include: - A request - A present gxy57

A memorable birthday Jerry read the email and decided to go to the shopping centre immediately. His boss asked him to take part in Year End party as an MC so he had a lot of things to do today. First of all, he needed to buy a new suits, checked out the content of the viral party. As soon as he had got dressed in the best possible manner, he went to the restaurant where hold the party. The hall of the restaurant was quite silent and he sat all alone. He was confused. He immediately phoned his boss what was the matter? Controlling her laughter, she managed to answer him, which sounded something like, “Our party will be on tomorrow, not today? Are you alright? ” He had no idea what to say to her. He just told her it was his mistake and went home. Back at home, when he go into his house, a small cake was provided to him by his parents. He wondered what the surprise really was, because he didn’t remember his birthday. His family as well as his friends celebrated a wonderful birthday party and they took a memorable photo with happy smiles.

A memorable birthday

Jerry read the email and decided to go to the shopping Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 immediately. His boss asked him to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :participate
take part
 in Year This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
End
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdinnercelebration
party
 as an MC This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 he had This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
 things to do This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
. This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, he needed to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 a new Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "suit"?suit
suits
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitored
checked
 out the content of the viral party.

As This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as he had This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 dressed in the best possible manner, he went to the restaurant where hold the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdinnercelebration
party
. The hall of the restaurant was quite Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).silent, and
silent and
 he sat all alone. He was confused
. He immediately phoned his boss what was the matter? Controlling her laughter, she managed to answer him, which sounded something like, “Our You use this word too often, consider replacing it withdinnercelebration
party
 will be on tomorrow, not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
? Are you alright? ” He had no This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 what to say to her. He This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informed
told
 her it was his mistake and went home.

Back at home, when he The pronoun 'he' is usually used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "goes", "went".goeswent
go
 into his This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
, a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 cake was provided
 to him by his parents. He wondered what the surprise really
 was, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 he didn’t remember his birthday. His family as well
 as his friends celebrated a wonderful birthday Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).party, and
party and
 they took a memorable photo with happy smiles. 