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Write a story beginning with “ although it was so beautiful, I didn’t use it any longer”

Write a story beginning with “ although it was so beautiful, I didn’t use it any longer” E7joM

Although it was so beautiful I didn’t use it any longer. My white dress I bought when I’m going on a trip to Hanoi was really pretty. My mother advised me to buy it despite and expensive dress. Therefore I wore it every day and I boasted about this dress to my friends. We have the same ideas. It was the most beautiful dress I had ever worn. However one day my mother put my dress into watching machine with her red shirt by mistake. Then my white dress turned into the red one. It looked super ugly. When I saw it, I shouted: ” Oh my God. Mum it is the best I have until now. You can’t find any the same dress as this one”. Only after one week did I be calm down and accepted this problem. I couldn’t wear it anymore.

“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
 it was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :gorgeousstunning
beautiful
 I didn’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 it any longer. My white You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgownfrockattiregarbuniformapparel
dress
 I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 when I’m going on a trip to Hanoi was The extreme adjective for pretty is "gorgeous".gorgeous
really pretty
. My mother advised me to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 it despite and expensive You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgownfrockattiregarbuniformapparel
dress
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Therefore,
Therefore
 I wore it every day and I boasted about this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgownfrockattiregarbuniformapparel
dress
 to my friends. We have the same This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtsconceptsnotions
ideas
. It was the most This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :gorgeousstunning
beautiful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgownfrockattiregarbuniformapparel
dress
 I had ever worn. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 one day my mother put my You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgownfrockattiregarbuniformapparel
dress
 into watching machine with her red shirt by mistake. Then my white You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgownfrockattiregarbuniformapparel
dress
 turned into the red one. It looked The extreme adjective for ugly is "hideous".hideous
super ugly
. When I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 it, I shouted: Don't put a space on both sides of a quote symbolapply
” 
Oh my God. Mum it is the best I have until This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
. You can’t find any the same You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgownfrockattiregarbuniformapparel
dress
 as this one”. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
Only
 after one week did I be calm down and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:admissible
accepted
 this problem. I couldn’t wear it anymore. 