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Write a story beginning with “ although it was so beautiful, I didn’t use it any longer”

Write a story beginning with “ although it was so beautiful, I didn’t use it any longer” E7joM
Although it was so beautiful I didn’t use it any longer. My white dress I bought when I’m going on a trip to Hanoi was really pretty. My mother advised me to buy it despite and expensive dress. Therefore I wore it every day and I boasted about this dress to my friends. We have the same ideas. It was the most beautiful dress I had ever worn. However one day my mother put my dress into watching machine with her red shirt by mistake. Then my white dress turned into the red one. It looked super ugly. When I saw it, I shouted: ” Oh my God. Mum it is the best I have until now. You can’t find any the same dress as this one”. Only after one week did I be calm down and accepted this problem. I couldn’t wear it anymore.
“Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
it was
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so
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beautiful
I didn’t
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use
it any longer. My white
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dress
I
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bought
when I’m going on a trip to Hanoi was
The extreme adjective for pretty is "gorgeous".
really pretty
. My mother advised me to
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buy
it despite and expensive
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dress
.
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Therefore
I wore it every day and I boasted about this
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dress
to my friends. We have the same
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ideas
. It was the most
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beautiful
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dress
I had ever worn.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
However
one day my mother put my
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dress
into watching machine with her red shirt by mistake. Then my white
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
turned into the red one. It looked
The extreme adjective for ugly is "hideous".
super ugly
. When I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
it, I shouted:
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”
Oh my God. Mum it is the best I have until
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
. You can’t find any the same
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
as this one”.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Only
after one week did I be calm down and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
accepted
this problem. I couldn’t wear it anymore.

IELTS essay Write a story beginning with “ although it was so beautiful, I didn’t use it any longer”

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
145 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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