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Write a short story (at least 80 words) describing an experience that you had.

Write a short story (at least 80 words) describing an experience that you had. 8G7br
When I was 11 years old, I and my family went to the beach in Binh Hung. It was a great idea when we chose to go on that day because the weather was sunny and cloudy. After about 2 hours, we finally got there, the coconut tree was standing, and it shook as a waving to me. Then I started to arrange luggage and prepared to swim. I was standing and took a look around. I saw a game, which was on the beach, the name "Playing banana float". I was interested in that game so I called my mom also my family to play it. Next, they agreed so I can play. At the moment, I climbed on the float, so I was a bit afraid but when I got there and the leader started to run it, it was so interesting and really fun. There was around me by water and just water. Then, we went around and saw some things interesting. Finally, out of time so the leader took us back to the sand. It was the great trip that I have ever been to. I hope that I can visit and enjoy that game again.
When I was 11 years
old
, I and my family went to the beach in
Binh
Hung. It was a great
idea
when we chose to go on that day
because
the weather was sunny and cloudy.

After about 2 hours, we
finally
got
there, the coconut tree was standing, and it shook as a waving to me. Then I
started
to arrange luggage and prepared to swim. I was standing and took a look around. I
saw
a game, which was on the beach, the name
"
Playing banana float
"
.
I
was interested
in that game
so
I called my mom
also
my family to play it.
Next
, they
agreed
so
I can play. At the moment, I climbed on the float,
so
I was a bit afraid
but
when I
got
there and the leader
started
to run it, it was
so
interesting and
really
fun. There was around me by water and
just
water. Then, we went around and
saw
some
things interesting.

Finally
, out of time
so
the leader took us back to the sand. It was the great trip that I have ever been to. I hope that I can visit and enjoy that game again.
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IELTS essay Write a short story (at least 80 words) describing an experience that you had.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
200 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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