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TOPIC: Information on hobbies

TOPIC: Information on hobbies jDyx1
My hobbies are very simple. After school, I follow my study plans that I have set to self-study either at home or other places. Beside this, I enjoy watching technology video about electrical and heavy engine on YouTube. Furthermore, for relaxation I enjoy listening to music, watching animated movie, going outside to take the fresh air in countryside, join charity event, reading book especially scientific book and so forth.
My hobbies are
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simple. After school, I follow my study plans that I have set to self-study either at home or other places. Beside this, I enjoy watching technology video about electrical and heavy engine on YouTube.
Furthermore
, for relaxation I enjoy listening to music, watching animated movie, going outside to take the fresh air in countryside,
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charity
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, reading book
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scientific book and
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forth.
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IELTS essay TOPIC: Information on hobbies

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
69 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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